纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子结构不够简洁，有语法和表达错误（如“frog by car but by paper”含糊）。回答没有清晰的主题句并且有口头语"uh"。建议用一到两句直接回答，随后用一到两句提供具体细节，避免重复并修正表达。

範例: Yes, I made paper crafts at primary school. We had weekly art lessons where we learned handcrafts and painting; I remember making a paper frog once, which involved folding and coloring it step by step.

建議: 回答直接但有语法时态和冠词问题（如“the drawing”“even draw”）。内容重复“passionate about art and the drawing”。建议用一到两句主题句并用一两句具体例子或频率说明，使用正确时态和冠词。

範例: I loved painting on paper as a child. I was passionate about art and often doodled in other classes, for example I would sketch classmates during breaks or decorate my notebooks.

建議: 回答内容明确但存在语法和用词问题（如“meals”应为“emails”，时态和连贯性需改进）。建议先给出简洁的肯定句，再解释原因并举例，注意拼写和时态一致。

範例: Yes, I still write physical letters on special occasions. For instance, I write love letters to my girlfriend and sometimes send handwritten postcards to friends when I travel because emails and apps like WeChat are more common now.

建議: 回答有逻辑和用词错误（如“every handwritten letters”“hurtfully”用词不当）。内容表达重复且句子冗长。建议简洁陈述立场并用一到两句具体理由或例子，注意选择正确形容词和名词单复数。

範例: Yes, I do. I keep my handwritten letters because they feel more personal and meaningful; for example, my friends' birthday notes are precious reminders of our relationship.

建議: 回答直接但有语法与表达错误（如“Who need”应为“Who needs”, “informations”不可数）。句子有重复信息。建议先简洁否定，再给原因并举例，注意语法和不可数名词。

範例: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens. Smartphones and digital devices let me take notes quickly, so I just use the memo app to record addresses or shopping lists.

× Yes, when I was in my primary school there was specific art lessons every week to teach us about handcrafting or painting.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school there were specific art lessons every week to teach us about handcrafting or painting.

句中谈论过去发生的事情，应使用过去时。原句中有两处问题：1）“in my primary school” 改为常见搭配 “in primary school”；2）主语是复数“art lessons”，谓语应使用过去式复数“were”。建议注意主语与谓语在过去时的一致性。

× And once, uh, we did a frog by car but by paper on the lessons.

✓ And once, uh, we made a frog from cardboard but using paper in the lesson.

原句有复数/单数与词汇搭配错误，且介词与名词使用不当。“did a frog” 不自然，应该用 “made a frog”。“by car” 应为 “cardboard”（或“card”）且与“but by paper” 对比需改为“but using paper”。建议学习常用固定搭配如 “make a model/figure from.../using...” 并注意单复数及介词使用。

× I liked to paint on the paper when I was a child.

✓ I liked to paint on paper when I was a child.

虽然句子整体为过去时（liked），但“on the paper” 中定冠词/泛指问题属时态相关习惯用法：一般表达“用纸上画画”应为泛指“on paper”，不加定冠词。建议掌握可数名词在泛指时的冠词省略规则。

× I was really passionate about art and the drawing, and sometimes I even draw on other lessons.

✓ I was really passionate about art and drawing, and sometimes I even drew in other lessons.

原句中“the drawing” 冠词使用不当，应为泛指“drawing”。此外，句子前半为过去情形，后半“draw” 应改为过去式 “drew” 以保持时态一致。建议注意名词前不必要的定冠词以及整句时态一致性。

× Yes, only on some special occasions like I want to write a love letter to my girlfriend or I want to write a letter from a very distant place to my friends.

✓ Yes, only on some special occasions, like when I wanted to write a love letter to my girlfriend or a letter from a distant place to my friends.

问题在于时态和从句结构。问题谈过去和一般现在混用，句子前有肯定回答“Do you still write physical letters?” 可用现在时或现在习惯，但原句后半用“I want” 不自然，应改为习惯性的现在时或过去经历。这里更自然的答案用一般现在或过去式。并且“from a very distant place” 可简化为 “from a distant place”。建议在陈述习惯或过去经历时保持时态一致，并使用适当的从属连词如“when”。

× Because nowadays meals and online social media like WeChat was really convenient.

✓ Because nowadays email and online social media like WeChat are really convenient.

原句中“meals” 是错误词，应为 “email”。另外主语是复数/不可数（email and social media），谓语应使用现在时复数“are”，而不是过去式“was”。建议注意词汇拼写并保持主谓时态一致。

× Yes, at least for me, I keep every handwritten letters because they are so meaningful and it's not easy in today's society to see handwriting letters, so they are very precious and it could convey the feelings and expressions hurtfully.

✓ Yes, at least for me, I keep every handwritten letter because they are so meaningful, and it's not easy in today's society to see handwritten letters, so they are very precious and they can convey feelings and expressions powerfully.

句子中“every handwritten letters” 主谓和数不一致，应为单数“every ... letter”。“handwriting letters” 用词不当，应为 “handwritten letters”。“it could convey... hurtfully” 语义及语法错误：应改为“they can convey feelings and expressions powerfully/strongly”，因为“hurtfully” 含义错误。建议注意“every + 单数名词” 结构和形容词“handwritten”的正确使用，以及情感表达用词的准确性。

× No, I don't. Who need papers and pens today.

✓ No, I don't. Who needs papers and pens today?

“Who need” 主语为第三人称单数（who 指一般人），谓语应为第三人称单数“needs”。另外把声明改为疑问句更符合语气。建议注意主语是第三人称单数时动词加 -s。

× We have our smartphones and we have a digital watch, so we don't need to carry with paper and pens to record some important informations because I could just write it on my memo.

✓ We have our smartphones and smartwatches, so we don't need to carry paper and pens to record important information because I can just write it in my notes.

原句有多个问题：1）“a digital watch” 可更自然为复数或“smartwatches”；2）“carry with paper and pens” 介词多余，应为 “carry paper and pens”；3）“informations” 不可数，应为 “information”；4）时态/情态动词“could” 改为一般现在“can”；5）“write it on my memo” 更自然为 “write it in my notes”。这些改动都属量词/不可数名词和搭配问题，建议注意不可数名词不加复数-s，动词与主语的一致性，以及常用搭配短语（carry paper, write in notes）。