纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but has some grammar and word-choice errors. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and concise supporting details. Replace “groups” with “things” or “crafts”, change “used to make” remains okay, and say why you liked it briefly. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like “so” or “and”.

範例: Yes, I made many paper crafts as a child. For example, I often folded birds and boats, and I enjoyed doing this because it was relaxing and helped my creativity.

建議: Your message is clear but contains grammar mistakes and repetition. Use correct past participle (“written”), avoid filler words like “uh”, and be specific about when you write diaries. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and link ideas with “but” or “however”.

範例: No, I don't write physical letters anymore. I have never written many formal letters, but I do sometimes keep a diary to relieve stress and reflect on my day.

建議: Good idea, but grammar and clarity need work. Use a clear topic sentence then provide one or two specific reasons. Fix verb forms (remove extra “are”), and avoid long, unclear phrases. Use linking words like “because” and “for example”.

範例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they serve as personal memories. For example, I keep letters I received as gifts because they remind me of happy moments.

建議: Content is fine but contains vocabulary errors and some unclear phrases. Correct “Peppers” to “papers” and avoid repeating ideas. Use a concise topic sentence and one reason linked with “because”. Mention when you draw as a specific detail.

範例: No, I usually don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I go out to relax with friends. However, when I get home I often draw pictures to unwind.

建議: The idea is clear but tense and word choice are inconsistent. Prefer past tense (“I liked”) for childhood activities. Be specific about methods (e.g., cutting and pasting) and avoid vague verbs like “dipping onto the board”. Use one linking word to contrast childhood and teenage interests.

範例: As a child, I liked making paper crafts such as flowers and small books by cutting and pasting pieces of paper. Later, as a teenager, I became more interested in painting on paper to add colours and details.

× Yes, I have made a lot of groups with paper.

✓ Yes, I have made a lot of things with paper.

The plural noun 'groups' is not appropriate for paper crafts here; 'a lot of things' or 'many crafts' fits meaning. Use a correct plural noun that collocates with 'made' and 'paper'. Suggestion: say 'a lot of crafts' or 'many paper crafts'. Use plural noun that matches context.

× I have never wrote any physical letter letters.

✓ I have never written any physical letters.

After 'have/has' (present perfect) you must use the past participle form 'written', not the simple past 'wrote'. Also 'letters' should be plural and avoid repeating the word. Suggestion: 'I have never written any physical letters.'

× Uh, but I do sometimes write Diaries due to my own benefits to relieve my stress.

✓ Uh, but I sometimes write diaries to help relieve my stress.

Diary is a common noun and should not be capitalised. 'Do sometimes' is acceptable but word order 'sometimes write' is more natural. 'Due to my own benefits' is unidiomatic; use 'to help' or 'to relieve'. Suggestion: 'I sometimes write diaries to help relieve my stress.' Note: this addresses lexical choice rather than one of the numbered categories; it most closely fits 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' (13) but primary error is word choice and capitalisation.

× Yes, they keep handwritten letters today because I think they are serve as a memory, a happy memory I have personally gift and all of the letters I have gotten because it reminds me of a sweet time.

✓ Yes, people keep handwritten letters today because I think they serve as memories; they are happy gifts I have personally received and the letters remind me of sweet times.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'they are serve' is incorrect — use 'they serve'. 'A memory' should be plural 'memories' if referring to many letters. 'Personally gift' is incorrect; use 'gifts I have personally received'. 'It reminds me' should match plural subject 'letters' so use 'they remind me'. Suggestion: simplify into clear clauses and ensure pronoun-verb agreement.

× I do not carry Peppers, but when I get home from outside I tend to draw some pictures.

✓ I do not carry papers, but when I get home I tend to draw some pictures.

'Peppers' is incorrect; likely intended 'papers'. Capitalisation is wrong. Use 'papers' (plural) or 'paper and pens' as earlier question asked. Suggestion: say 'I do not carry paper or pens' or 'I do not carry papers'.

× No, I do not carry paper and pens with me when I go out because when I go out it is really with my friends to enjoy nature.

✓ No, I do not carry paper and pens when I go out because I usually go out with my friends to enjoy nature.

Sentence is awkward and has missing subject for second clause: 'it is really with my friends' is ungrammatical. Use 'I usually go out with my friends'. Maintain parallel structure and clear subject. Suggestion: '...because I usually go out with my friends to enjoy nature.'

× As a child, I would like to do crafting with them.

✓ As a child, I liked crafting with them.

'Would like' expresses present desire; to talk about habitual past use past tense 'liked' or 'used to like'. Also 'do crafting' is less natural than 'liked crafting' or 'make crafts'. Suggestion: 'As a child, I liked making crafts with paper.'

× I would like to make flowers and books with them by cutting them into pieces and dipping them onto the board.

✓ I liked making flowers and books from paper by cutting it into pieces and gluing it onto the board.

Again 'would like' wrong for past habitual actions — use 'liked' or 'used to'. 'Dipping them onto the board' is incorrect verb choice; 'gluing' is appropriate. Pronoun agreement: 'paper' (uncountable) and 'it' instead of 'them'. Suggestion: 'I used to make flowers and books from paper by cutting it into pieces and gluing it onto the board.'

× But when I was a teenager, I wanted to paint with papers.

✓ But when I was a teenager, I wanted to paint on paper.

'Paint with papers' is unidiomatic; use 'paint on paper' or 'paint with paper' only if using paper as a tool. 'Paper' is usually uncountable here, not plural 'papers'. Suggestion: '...I wanted to paint on paper.'