纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答需要更自然、连贯并且简洁。先直接回答问题，再用一两句补充具体细节并使用连接词。注意时态一致与发音清晰，避免重复。比如说明常做哪些纸工艺、什么时候做、与谁一起以及是否参加比赛等细节。

範例: Yes, I have. I often folded paper airplanes and simple origami animals when I was a child. I usually made them with my classmates during break times, and we sometimes held friendly competitions to see whose plane could fly the farthest.

建議: 回答不够聚焦且混乱。应先直接回答是否写实体信，再给出一两个具体原因或情景。保持句子简短并用连接词衔接。可以提到写信的频率、对象和原因（如更有诚意或用于特殊场合）。

範例: Not much these days. While I usually communicate by email or messages, I sometimes write physical letters for special occasions like thank-you notes or when I want to show extra care.

建議: 表达需要更有条理并用连接词衔接。先给出总体观点，再解释原因并提供例子。避免重复用词，注意主谓一致和时态。可以说明哪些场合人们会保留手写信件。

範例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters. Although email is common, many keep letters from loved ones because they are personal and meaningful, for example birthday cards or notes from parents.

建議: 回答清晰且比较自然，但可以更简洁并增加一两个具体例子支持观点。使用连接词提高流畅度并避免口语填充词，如 "you know"。

範例: Not usually. Nowadays I rely on my smartphone for taking photos and notes, so I rarely carry a notebook or pen unless I expect to need them for sketching or filling out forms.

建議: 回答包含内容但重复较多。建议先用一句主题句说明主要活动，再用一两句具体细节并使用连接词。例如说明写作业占用时间和折纸的类型或与谁一起做。注意时态（过去式）。

範例: As a child, I mostly used paper for homework and for making crafts. After school I often did worksheets, and I also enjoyed folding paper airplanes and simple origami figures with my friends.

× Yes, I do make a lot of handmade crafts waistpaper and most of them were airplanes and we will make we were we will meet some airplanes and have competition with others and see which one is for

✓ Yes, I make a lot of handmade crafts with waste paper. Most of them were airplanes. We would make some airplanes and have competitions with others to see which one flies best.

句子存在多处问题：1) “waistpaper”拼写及用词错误，应为“waste paper”（废纸），属于词汇选择问题（但因列表中允许的项有限，归入现在分词形式错误下修正）；2) 原句冗长且时态混乱（混合现在时和将来/过去时）。将句子拆分并统一时态（一般现在时或过去习惯用过去式/情态动词表达习惯）。建议将复杂句拆成短句，明确时态：描述经常/习惯性动作用一般现在时或“would”表过去常做的事。注意单词拼写与用词。

× Yes, as you know, I was an undergraduate and we saw it means I will have a lot of homework so and it will show our our tutors and almost of them may be right near the computer but still some of some

✓ Yes. When I was an undergraduate, I had a lot of homework. Most of my tutors worked on computers, but some still preferred handwritten work.

原句时态和表达混乱：开始用过去时（was an undergraduate）后又出现将来时（I will have），且有重复和不完整的短语。根据语境应全部用过去时描述学生时代经历。建议将句子按照时间顺序整理并使用一致时态，删去重复词汇，并把不完整的片段补全或去掉。

× Yes, I believe so even though most of them maybe use the computers to write letters to each other but still some still, some of them using the handwrites to write letters and I will use some handwriting letters to others

✓ Yes, I believe so. Even though most people may use computers to write letters to each other, some still use handwriting. I would also write some letters by hand.

原句代词使用不当且结构不完整：“them”指代不明，应使用“people”；“maybe”位置和形式不当，应为“may/ might”；“using the handwrites”语法错误，正确为“use handwriting”或“write by hand”。此外句子应分成几部分以提高清晰度并统一时态。建议明确代词指代，使用“people”或“they”，并使用正确的动词结构“write by hand”。

× Honestly no because you know In now days people always carry their phones and we will do everything in our phone and like take pictures and write the notes. It's all finished by phones.

✓ Honestly, no. Nowadays people always carry their phones and do everything on them, like taking pictures and writing notes. It's all done on phones.

问题包括时态与固定短语错误：“In now days”应为“nowadays”；“we will do everything in our phone”时态和介词错误，应该是一般现在时并用介词“on”。“It's all finished by phones”被动与介词不自然，更自然的表达是“It's all done on phones”。建议使用现在时描述普遍事实，注意固定搭配（do something on a phone），并避免不必要被动结构。

× For me, I will do with paper like writing my homework and most of my time was writing my homework after school and as as I just said and I will fold some airplanes and something handmade and craft

✓ As a child, I used paper to write my homework. Most of the time after school I was writing homework. I also folded paper airplanes and made other handmade crafts.

描述童年活动应使用过去时，原句混用将来时“will”与过去时“was”，造成时态混乱。建议将所有动作改为过去时以保持一致，并把句子拆成更清晰的短句，使用正确的名词短语“handmade crafts”或“handicrafts”。