纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 注意时态和用词准确性，避免冗余并使回答更自然。可以把过去的活动限定在过去时，简化表达并补充一两条具体细节。例如把“at that time”改为“when I was younger/at school”，将“at presence”改为“as gifts”或“on special occasions”。总体保持句子不超过5句并使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

範例: Yes. When I was at school I often made pop-up cards and origami with my friends. I felt over the moon when we finished them because I could display them on my shelf or give them as gifts to my family. Making them was also a fun way to be creative and spend time together.

建議: 注意句子连贯与准确表达，避免出现语法或逻辑错误（如“you sync my mobile phones”）。用简洁句子说明原因并补充具体例子或频率。可以使用连接词解释原因，例如“because”或“so”。

範例: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore because texting is much faster. For example, I usually message my friends on my phone rather than writing, which saves both time and money.

建議: 回答思路清晰，但用词略显重复。可以更具体说明哪类人会保留手写信以及原因，使用连接词（for example, because）来丰富细节。注意“handwriting letters”应改为“handwritten letters”。

範例: I think it depends on personality. For example, people who value sentimental items often keep handwritten letters because they feel more personal, while others prefer digital messages for convenience.

建議: 回答直接且自然，但可以更精简并用更地道的表达。可补充一两个具体情境说明何时会带纸笔（如旅行或特别场合），并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Not usually. Paper and pens take up space, so I prefer using my phone to take notes. However, I might bring a notebook when I travel or attend classes.

建議: 总体内容丰富且具体，但时态一致性和用词可改进。把现在时改为过去时（“I also liked”），避免重复形容词（e.g. “beautiful and pretty”）。可加少量细节说明感受或结果。

範例: As a child I used to make pop-up cards decorated with my own paintings. I also enjoyed entering origami and paper-cutting competitions, where we would race to make the nicest butterfly and sometimes win small prizes.

× I made pop up cards and origami with my friends at that time.

✓ I made pop-up cards and origami with my friends at that time.

原句主要是拼写/格式问题，“pop-up”作为复合形容词或名词通常用连字符。建议在书写合成词时使用连字符以提升规范性。

× I was over the moon after finishing them because I could not only display them in my cabinets but also give them to my family at presence.

✓ I was over the moon after finishing them because I could not only display them in my cabinets but also give them to my family in person.

“at presence”是不正确的表达。英语中正确短语为 “in person”（亲自）. 此外“cabinets”若指家里的陈列柜可保留。建议记住常用固定搭配，避免直译。

× No, I don't usually write physical letters now. Nowadays I text to my friends, you sync my mobile phones and it also doesn't waste time and money.

✓ No, I don't usually write physical letters now. Nowadays I text my friends, sync my mobile phone with others, and it also doesn't waste time or money.

原句存在多处问题：1) “text to my friends” 中不需要介词“to”，应直接用动词+宾语 “text my friends”。2) “you sync my mobile phones” 主语和人称不一致且逻辑不清，改为一般陈述“I sync my mobile phone with others” 或简单省略具体同步动作；“mobile phones”改为单数“mobile phone”更符合此处指个人设备。3) 并列连词和否定短语“doesn't waste time and money”在习惯表达中常用“or”连接“time or money”。解释用简体中文说明注意固定搭配和人称一致。

× Nowadays I text to my friends, you sync my mobile phones and it also doesn't waste time and money.

✓ Nowadays I text my friends, sync my mobile phone, and it also doesn't waste time or money.

原句中的“you”使用不当，使句子主语从“I”突变为“you”，造成人称不一致，应保持第一人称。将“my mobile phones”改为“my mobile phone”使代词与名词一致。建议保持句子主语一致，避免混用人称。

× I think it depends on people's personalities. People like me who cherish physical connections still keep handwriting letters today.

✓ I think it depends on people's personalities. People like me who cherish physical connections still keep handwritten letters today.

“handwriting letters” 用法不当。作为形容词应使用过去分词“handwritten”来修饰“letters”。“handwriting”是名词，表示“手写的动作”，不能直接修饰“letters”。建议使用过去分词作后置或前置定语（handwritten letters）。

× If I take papers and pens when I go out they always take up space in my bag.

✓ If I take papers and pens when I go out, they always take up space in my bag.

句子缺少逗号使从句和主句衔接不清。虽非严格语法错误，但加上逗号能更清晰。此外“take papers and pens”更自然可改为“bring papers and pens”，但仍属于风格改进而非必需改动。建议在复合句中在从句后加逗号以增强可读性，并优先使用更自然的动词“bring”。

× Instead I can just use my mobile phones to keep notes.

✓ Instead, I can just use my mobile phone to keep notes.

“mobile phones”应为单数“mobile phone”，因为说话者通常指自己的手机。句首加逗号提升可读性。保持主语与所属物的一致性（my + 单数名词）。

× I used to make pop-up cards featuring my own paintings with my friends.

✓ I used to make pop-up cards featuring my own paintings with my friends.

此句语法本身正确，仅确认时态“used to”用于过去习惯，符合语境，因此无需改动。保留原句。

× I also like taking part in origami and paper cutting competitions, where we competed to see who could create beautiful and pretty butterflies the fastest.

✓ I also liked taking part in origami and paper-cutting competitions, where we competed to see who could create beautiful butterflies the fastest.

时态应与前文过去习惯保持一致，“I used to...”，因此将“I also like”改为“I also liked”。另外“paper cutting”作为合成词常写作“paper-cutting”。“beautiful and pretty”重复表达冗余，保留“beautiful”或“pretty”即可，故删去“pretty”。建议保持时态一致、避免重复形容词并使用连字符写复合名词。