纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example with a linking word. Reduce filler words (uh) and avoid repeating 'used to'.

範例: Yes, I often make paper crafts. For example, at school summer camp I made paper flowers and small cardboard models, and I enjoyed decorating them with paint and glitter.

建議: Start with a direct short answer, then give one clear reason. Remove hesitations and redundant phrases; use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' correctly.

範例: No, I rarely write physical letters nowadays because it is faster to send messages on my phone, and I can use emojis to express emotions quickly.

建議: Answer directly and give a concise, specific example. Improve grammar (tenses and pronouns) and remove fillers. Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce the anecdote.

範例: Yes, some people keep handwritten letters. For example, a friend's mother saved the letters her husband wrote while he was serving in the army, and they still treasure them now.

建議: Give a clear personal answer and a brief reason, then add one coherent observation. Fix negatives and awkward phrasing; avoid fillers and unclear descriptions.

範例: No, I usually don't carry paper or a pen because I prefer using my phone. However, some people do bring sketchbooks and pens, especially artists who like to draw strangers they observe.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then mention one or two specific activities with a linking word. Avoid repeating 'used to' and improve sentence flow.

範例: As a child I loved making paper boards and folding paper planes. For instance, during the rainy season I would craft decorated boards, and at school I often competed with friends to see whose paper plane flew farthest.

× I love to make crafts with papers and cardboards.

✓ I love to make crafts with paper and cardboard.

Use uncountable nouns 'paper' and 'cardboard' without plural -s when referring to the material in general; do not pluralize them here. Also no article is needed when speaking generally about a material. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I used to participate in my school summer camp where I used to make uh, flowers and other stuff with the papers.

✓ I used to participate in my school summer camp where I made flowers and other things from paper.

Avoid repeating 'used to' twice; once is enough to show past habitual action. Use 'made' (past simple) for completed habitual actions and 'paper' (uncountable) and 'other things' instead of informal 'stuff'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× No, I don't think I need to write physical letters to my friends or my relatives because the reason is in the modern world it I feel this is easier to just type the message and send to the person, uh with the with the emojis to share the true feelings.

✓ No, I don't think I need to write physical letters to my friends or relatives because in the modern world it's easier to just type a message and send it, using emojis to express feelings.

Simplify and correct word order: use contraction 'it's' and 'a message' (singular, countable) and 'send it' to refer back to the message. Remove redundant words ('the reason is', duplicate 'with the'). Use 'express feelings' rather than 'share the true feelings' for natural phrasing. This addresses sentence structure and article use. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Well, yes, I have one friend whose mother kept all the letters written by her husband during he was in he was working in the army.

✓ Well, yes, I have one friend whose mother kept all the letters written by her husband while he was working in the army.

Use 'while he was' instead of the fragmented 'during he was in he was working'. 'During' should be followed by a noun phrase; here 'while' + clause is correct. Also remove duplicated words and ensure pronoun 'he' clearly refers to the husband. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Now they are both in their 70s and I saw umm the letter she kept.

✓ Now they are both in their 70s, and I saw the letters she kept.

If mother kept 'all the letters' earlier, refer to them in plural 'the letters'. Use past simple 'saw' is OK for a past event you witnessed. Add comma for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1

× No, I usually don't carry any papers with me or not either the pen.

✓ No, I usually don't carry any paper or a pen with me.

Use 'paper' uncountable and place 'a pen' correctly. Avoid double negation 'or not either'. Keep parallel structure 'carry any X or Y'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× But uh, I saw most of the people like to carry those items, mostly the people who love to draw the stranger on their papers.

✓ But I saw that most people like to carry those items, especially people who like to draw strangers on paper.

Use 'most people' (no 'the'), 'especially' for emphasis, plural 'strangers' and uncountable 'paper'. Remove unnecessary filler 'uh' and 'saw that' clarifies observation. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Well, I used to make paper boards and I was playing with them during the rainy season and also the paper planes, I used to play with them during my free time in my school.

✓ Well, I used to make cardboard sheets and play with them during the rainy season, and I also used to play with paper planes during my free time at school.

Use consistent past habitual 'used to' rather than mixing continuous 'was playing'. Replace informal 'paper boards' with 'cardboard sheets' (or 'paper boards' if intended as craft boards) and use 'paper planes' consistently. Use 'at school' rather than 'in my school' for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:6