纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), correct verb forms, and give a specific example. Keep within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect idea and example.

範例: Yes, I have. I often make small paper crafts during exams to help me concentrate. For example, last week I folded a tiny origami crane and then copied my final answer neatly onto the exam paper to calm my nerves.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (use infinitive after 'prefer': 'prefer to write'), reduce hesitation, and add a brief reason or specific circumstance when you write letters.

範例: No, I don't usually write physical letters; I prefer to write emails because they are faster. However, I sometimes write a handwritten note when I send a gift because it feels more personal and ritualistic.

建議: Use clearer expressions and correct singular/plural and metaphors. Provide one concise reason supported by an example and avoid repetition and fillers.

範例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they have sentimental value. For instance, parents often save their children's handwritten notes as keepsakes that remind them of special moments.

建議: Make the reply concise and correct grammar (write notes for other people; sketch landscapes). Use a linking word to list uses and give one specific example.

範例: Yes, I do. I usually carry a small notebook and a pen because I use them to jot down ideas and to sketch landscapes. For example, I recently sketched a park bench while waiting for a friend.

建議: Answer with correct past tense and be specific: replace 'write and painting' with 'write and paint', 'fold into a family' likely means 'fold paper into figures (origami)'. Explain briefly why you enjoyed it.

範例: When I was a child, I wrote stories and painted pictures on paper, and I loved folding origami animals. It was my favorite pastime because it let me be creative and made me proud to display my work.

× For example when I do exam I always umm made a craft with paper and then I copy the correct one uh on the umm exam paper.

✓ For example, when I take exams I always make a craft with paper and then I copy the correct one onto the exam paper.

The sentence mixes present and past forms incorrectly. 'When I do exam' should be 'when I take exams' to use the correct collocation and plural; 'always made' (past) conflicts with habitual 'always' so use present simple 'always make'; 'I copy' should be 'I copy... onto' with preposition 'onto' to indicate writing on the paper. Use consistent present-tense for habitual actions.

× No, I don't. It's unusual. I prefer write e-mail, uh, instead of physical letters.

✓ No, I don't. It's unusual. I prefer to write emails instead of physical letters.

After the verb 'prefer' when followed by a verb, use the infinitive 'to write' or the gerund; 'prefer to write' is natural. 'E-mail' should be plural 'emails' when referring generally. Also remove filler words. Maintain present tense for habitual preference.

× But uh, sometimes I will, uh, write physical letters.

✓ But sometimes I do write physical letters.

Using 'will' here is unnatural for habitual actions; use present simple 'do write' or 'sometimes I write' to indicate occasional habit. This fits the present time frame.

× I think this that is ritual when I send a gift with letter.

✓ I think it is a ritual when I send a gift with a letter.

The phrase 'this that is' is ungrammatical; use 'it is' or 'this is'. Also add the article 'a' before 'letter' and reorder words to form a clear noun phrase 'send a gift with a letter.' The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb structure.

× Yes, they do. I think handwritten letters is candle of art.

✓ Yes, they do. I think handwritten letters are a form of art.

Subject 'handwritten letters' is plural so verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Candle of art' is incorrect idiom; use 'a form of art' or 'a kind of art.' Include the article 'a' before 'form.'

× We should value this physical letters on paper.

✓ We should value these physical letters on paper.

'Letters' is plural so use demonstrative 'these' not 'this.' No article needed before 'physical letters' here. Preposition 'on paper' is acceptable; ensure plural agreement.

× Sometimes I will use paper and pens for example.

✓ Sometimes I use paper and pens, for example.

The auxiliary 'will' is unnecessary for habitual action; use present simple 'use.' Also move 'for example' to the end for clearer sentence flow. No -ing change required here; correction aligns tense and word order.

× Sometimes I will write notes for other people's and sometimes I will do sketch for sketch about the landscapes.

✓ Sometimes I write notes for other people, and sometimes I sketch landscapes.

'Other people's' is incorrect; use 'other people' (object form) not possessive. 'Do sketch for sketch about the landscapes' is ungrammatical; use the verb 'sketch' directly and 'landscapes' without 'the' for general meaning. Also use present simple for habitual actions.

× When I was a child, I used paper frequently.

✓ When I was a child, I used paper frequently.

Sentence is acceptable but 'used paper' is slightly odd; could be improved to 'used paper a lot' but it fits past habitual use. No grammatical change required.

× I write and painting on paper and I like to fold the paper into a family.

✓ I wrote and painted on paper, and I liked to fold the paper into shapes that looked like a family.

The original mixes present and -ing forms in a past context. Use past tense verbs 'wrote' and 'painted' to match 'When I was a child.' 'Fold the paper into a family' is unclear; specify 'shapes that looked like a family.' This corrects tense consistency and clarifies meaning.

× It's my player thing.

✓ It was my favorite pastime.

'Player thing' is nonstandard and unclear. In past context 'it was' fits. Use 'favorite pastime' or 'favorite thing to do' to express meaning clearly.