纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and give one clear example with specific details. Start with a topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases.

範例: Yes. I often make paper crafts such as handmade birthday cards. For example, last month I made a card for a friend with photos we took together and glued decorative stickers on the cover, which made the gift very personal.

建議: Remove hesitations and repetition, use correct verb forms, and explain briefly why you write letters with a specific example. Use linking words like because or so to show reason.

範例: Yes, I still write physical letters because I find them more meaningful than messages. For example, I recently wrote a thank-you letter to my teacher, explaining how her lessons helped me, and she said it really touched her.

建議: Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague phrases. Start with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and a short result, using linking words such as because, therefore, or so.

範例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they feel personal and emotional. Therefore, when someone receives a handwritten note, they often treasure it and keep it as a reminder of the relationship.

建議: Be grammatically correct and logical. Clearly answer yes or no, then explain briefly with a specific reason and example. Avoid contradictions and unnecessary mentions of digital devices unless relevant.

範例: Not usually, because I rely on my smartphone for notes and photos. However, I sometimes bring a small notebook and pen when I expect to sketch or jot down ideas, for example during art classes.

建議: Organize the answer: state the activity, then give specific supporting details (who, how, and why). Use past tense consistently and linking words like and or because to connect ideas.

範例: As a child, I loved making paper planes and drawing pictures on them to give to my friends and my parents. I used bright colors and silly messages, and the planes often made everyone laugh because they flew so unpredictably.

× Yes, to be honest I have made some handmade products with paper like birthday cards or some home paper to as a present to my friends.

✓ Yes, to be honest I have made some handmade products from paper, like birthday cards or simple paper crafts as presents for my friends.

Use of 'with paper' is awkward; 'from paper' is correct. 'home paper to as a present' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'simple paper crafts as presents'. Also change 'present' to plural 'presents' to match 'my friends'. Ensure natural preposition and noun order.

× For example, on my friend's birthday I made birthday cards with photos we took together and hot.

✓ For example, on my friend's birthday I made birthday cards with photos we took together and decorated them.

The sentence ends with 'and hot', which is nonsensical here. Likely intended to describe decoration or adding something else. Remove 'hot' and provide a clear verb phrase 'decorated them'. Keep past tense for completed action.

× Yes, absolutely. I write physical letters very much MMM, I realize that is really they they are really rewarding and shows much respect and I will appreciate to the people that we give as a present.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I write physical letters a lot. I realize they are really rewarding, show respect, and are appreciated by the people who receive them.

Multiple issues: 'very much' is informal and placement is awkward; 'write physical letters a lot' is natural. Remove filler 'MMM'. Pronoun repetition 'they they' is an error. Verb agreement: 'they are' not 'is'; 'shows' should be 'show' to agree with plural subject. 'I will appreciate to the people that we give as a present' is incorrect; use passive or correct object: 'are appreciated by the people who receive them'.

× Yes, absolutely handwritten letters is really rewarding and show many respect and appreciate to everyone.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Handwritten letters are really rewarding, show much respect, and are appreciated by everyone.

Subject-verb agreement: 'letters' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Parallel structure requires verbs to agree: 'show' matches plural. Use 'much respect' (uncountable) rather than 'many respect'. 'Appreciate to everyone' is incorrect; use passive 'are appreciated by everyone'.

× So I think it's really unique in these in even this modern lives, if people receive handwritten letter, they will like, really appreciate and happy.

✓ So I think it's really unique in modern life; if people receive a handwritten letter, they will truly appreciate it and be happy.

Awkward phrases 'in these in even this modern lives' -> 'in modern life'. 'handwritten letter' needs article 'a'. Coordinate verbs require 'will truly appreciate it and be happy' rather than listing mismatched forms. Remove filler 'like'.

× Personally, I'm really carry paper and pens with along when I go out because because of the development of modern digital devices like smartphone, I can bring it to everywhere.

✓ Personally, I usually carry paper and pens with me when I go out because, despite the development of modern digital devices like smartphones, I still bring them everywhere.

'I'm really carry' is ungrammatical; use 'I usually carry' or 'I often carry'. 'with along' is incorrect; use 'with me'. 'because because' redundant. 'smartphone' should be plural 'smartphones' when general. 'I can bring it to everywhere' is incorrect pronoun and preposition; use 'I still bring them everywhere'.

× It's umm instead of bring cameras or paper.

✓ I prefer carrying them instead of relying on cameras or only using digital notes.

Fragment: 'It's umm instead of bring cameras or paper' is unclear. Provide clear comparative structure: 'I prefer carrying them instead of relying on cameras or only using digital notes.' Maintain consistency and proper verb forms.

× When I was a child I usually loved making pay making paper planes to like give it to my friends and my parents after draw some lovely pictures on the paper.

✓ When I was a child I usually loved making paper planes to give to my friends and my parents after drawing lovely pictures on the paper.

Incorrect forms: 'making pay making' is typo; use 'making'. Use gerund 'drawing' after 'after'. 'to like give it' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'to give'. Ensure object agreement: 'give to my friends and my parents'.

× I really love the activity because it's make everyone laugh.

✓ I really loved the activity because it made everyone laugh.

Tense consistency: describing childhood should use past tense 'loved' and 'made'. 'it's make' is incorrect; for past narrative use 'it made'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'it made' not 'it make'.