纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and slightly longer (max 5 sentences) by adding a brief reason and an example using a linking word. Use clearer phrasing and correct contraction and punctuation.

範例: I haven't made many paper crafts, but I'd like to try them someday because they seem relaxing and creative. For example, I might start with simple origami such as cranes or a paper flower to practice folding techniques. This would be a fun hobby to do at home on weekends.

建議: Improve grammar and natural phrasing, add a linking word and a specific detail about frequency or occasions to enrich the response within the sentence limit.

範例: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally, especially on special days like our anniversary. I often write down my feelings in a short handwritten note and leave it in his office as a surprise. It feels more personal than a text message.

建議: Make the answer slightly more concise and add a specific example or comparison using a linking word to strengthen the point. Avoid repeating similar phrases.

範例: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they are meaningful and personal. For example, people often save wedding cards or thank-you notes from close friends, which hold sentimental value more than digital messages.

建議: Correct grammar and streamline the sentence. Use linking words and be specific about how you use the diary and how often to improve coherence and naturalness.

範例: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and pen when I go out because I like to record my daily plans and achievements. For example, I use the diary to list tasks in the morning and tick them off in the evening to organize my thoughts clearly.

建議: Fix grammar and vocabulary errors, provide clearer specifics and linking words, and keep within five sentences. Mention what the drawings meant or how your friend reacted to add depth.

範例: As a child I used to draw small pictures, like a heart or a store, on pieces of paper and give them to my friends. For instance, I gave drawings to a friend named Nijma, whose name means 'star', and she loved receiving them. Those simple gifts made us happy and strengthened our friendship.

× 'To be honest, no I haven't, but I would like to give it a try.'

✓ 'To be honest, no, I haven't, but I would like to give it a try.'

'Comma needed after introductory phrase and after no to separate clauses; not strictly an article error but punctuation improves clarity.'

× 'Yes, I sometimes like to write down my feeling to my husband and send it to him as a gift in his office.'

✓ 'Yes, I sometimes like to write down my feelings to my husband and send them to him as a gift at his office.'

'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' because it refers to multiple sentiments; use pronoun agreement 'them' to refer to plural feelings; use preposition "at" for location of his office. Also avoid "write down feelings to him"—"write my feelings to my husband" is natural.'

× 'I think so because many people still value them and use them during their special occasions to say thank you or to express their feeling to their close friends.'

✓ 'I think so because many people still value them and use them on special occasions to say thank you or to express their feelings to close friends.'

'Special occasions' normally use preposition "on" rather than "during"; 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings'; omit unnecessary articles like 'their' before 'close friends' for natural phrasing.'

× 'Yes, I use them a lot because I like to write down in my day in my diary my plan during the day and what I had achieved and to organize my thought clearly.'

✓ 'Yes, I use them a lot because I like to write in my diary my plan for the day and what I have achieved, and to organize my thoughts clearly.'

'Write down' can be simplified to 'write' when followed by the content; 'in my day in my diary' is redundant—use 'in my diary' or 'for the day'; use 'for the day' to express plan; 'what I had achieved' should be present perfect 'what I have achieved' to relate to the current diary entry; 'thought' should be plural 'thoughts'.

× 'During my childhood I used to draw a store and heart in a piece of paper and gave it to my friend because she's name was Nijma which mean a story.'

✓ 'During my childhood I used to draw a star and a heart on a piece of paper and give it to my friend because her name was Nijma, which means "star".'

'Used to' requires base verbs: use 'give' (not 'gave') after 'used to draw'; 'store' is a typo for 'star'; use 'on a piece of paper' not 'in'; pronoun 'she's name' is incorrect—use 'her name'; 'which mean' should be 'which means' (present tense for meanings); provide correct translation 'star'.