纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答应更自然、语法更准确并提供具体细节。可把主题句说清楚（例如学会折纸哪种作品），然后用一两句补充如何学的、感受或用途，注意时态和冠词的使用，避免重复词如“video Video”。使用连接词如“so”或“and”使句子流畅。

範例: Yes, I recently learned how to make an origami boat from an online video. I practiced folding it several times until it floated well, and now I enjoy doing it in my free time because it relaxes me.

建議: 句子结构和语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。应先直接回答（Yes），然后说明写信的对象与频率，并具体说明写信如何影响你们的关系，注意动词、冠词和代词的正确使用，避免模糊表述。

範例: Yes, I still write letters to a friend who lives overseas. Writing by hand helps me express my feelings more personally, so it strengthens our friendship.

建議: 回答需要更自然地表达观点并给出具体理由或例子。避免使用模糊或错误的词组（如“prove the relationship between each other's”），改用“keep as memories”或“treasure them as personal mementos”。使用连接词如“because”后跟具体原因。

範例: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters as personal mementos because they are sentimental and remind them of important relationships or special moments.

建議: 回答要简洁并给出具体原因或例子。修正语法错误（例如冠词和形容词比较级），补全未完成的句子。可以提到手机应用的便利性以及在什么情况下仍会携带笔纸。

範例: No, I usually don't carry paper or a pen because email and messaging apps are more convenient. However, I sometimes bring a small notebook when I expect to take notes or draw.

建議: 回答需更流畅并注意过去习惯表达（used to），同时提供具体例子并修正词汇和语法错误（如“when I was a child”，“draw animals or cute cartoons”，“keen on drawing”）。控制句子长度不超过五句并使用连接词如“for example”或“so”。

範例: When I was a child, I used to draw anything I liked, for example animals and cute cartoon characters. I was keen on drawing, and it made me very happy.

× Yes, I recently learned how to float an origami from video Video.

✓ Yes, I recently learned how to make an origami that floats from a video.

原句中“float an origami”用法不自然，通常说“make an origami”或“fold an origami”，要表达会折出会浮的纸鹤/纸船，应改为“make an origami that floats”。此外“from video Video”重复且不自然，改为“from a video”。建议：使用常见搭配（make/fold an origami），并用从句说明特性。

× It was funny and I discovered a new hobby that makes me happy.

✓ It was funny and I discovered a new hobby that makes me happy.

句子本身时态混合是合理的（过去的经历和现在的结果），但注意语序和时态一致性：‘It was funny’（过去）与‘I discovered’（过去）配对，而‘that makes me happy’用现在时描述持续状态是正确的。此句无需改动，仅提示：确保过去经历和现在影响的时态区分清楚。

× Yes, I still write the letter to my friend who lives in overseas because handwriting letters can makes me our relationship more.

✓ Yes, I still write letters to my friend who lives overseas because handwritten letters can make our relationship stronger.

错误点：1) “the letter”应为复数或不定冠词，改为“letters”；2) “in overseas”介词错误，改为“overseas”或“in a foreign country”；3) “handwriting letters”表达不自然，改为“handwritten letters”；4) “can makes me our relationship more”语法错误且表达混乱，改为“can make our relationship stronger”。建议：注意冠词与可数名词一致，使用正确形容词（handwritten），动词搭配（make sth + adjective）。

× Yes, the people will keep their handwritten letter because it was a an effective way to prove the relationship between each other's.

✓ Yes, people will keep their handwritten letters because they are an effective way to show the relationship between people.

错误点：1) “the people”冗余，一般用“people”；2) “handwritten letter”应为复数“letters”；3) “it was a an effective way”主语与谓语不一致，应与复数匹配用“are an effective way”或改为单数结构；4) “between each other's”错误使用反身或所有格，改为“between people”或“between each other”。建议：注意单复数一致，避免过度使用定冠词，正确使用“each other”。

× No, I don't carry paper or a pen when I go out because e-mail application is an convenience way for me to go everywhere and.

✓ No, I don't carry paper or a pen when I go out because email applications are a convenient way for me to communicate on the go.

错误点：1) “e-mail application”单复数/冠词问题，改为“email applications”或“an email app”；2) “is an convenience”冠词与形容词形式错误，应为“a convenient”；3) “to go everywhere and.”语义不完整且结尾多余连词，应改为“to communicate on the go”或“when I'm out”。建议：注意冠词（a/an）和形容词形式，句子要完整表达目的。

× When I was child I used to draw anything I want, suggest animal or other cut cartoons because I was key on drawing and it was very funny.

✓ When I was a child, I used to draw anything I wanted, such as animals or other cute cartoons, because I was keen on drawing and it was a lot of fun.

错误点：1) “When I was child”缺冠词，改为“When I was a child”；2) “anything I want”时态不一致，描述过去应用过去式“wanted”；3) “suggest animal or other cut cartoons”表达错误，改为“such as animals or other cute cartoons”且“cute”拼写；4) “I was key on drawing”用词错误，应为“keen on drawing”；5) “it was very funny”用于活动愉快应改为“it was a lot of fun”或“it was very fun”。建议：注意过去习惯用过去时，使用固定搭配（keen on, such as），并检查拼写。