纸— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap doğru ama geliştirilmesi gerekiyor. Konuya doğrudan yanıt veriyorsunuz fakat cümle yapısı basit ve tek cümleyle sınırlı. Daha doğal ve etkili olmak için konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından nasıl yaptığınızı veya hangi malzemeleri kullandığınızı belirten 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (for example, and then, so) kullanarak açıklamayı akıcı hale getirin.

範例: Yes, I often make paper crafts and one of my favorites is a paper planet. For example, I cut circles from colored paper, layer them to create rings, and glue them together. I usually decorate them with markers and glitter, so they look more realistic.

建議: İyi bir fikir veriyorsunuz ama dilbilgisi ve ifade netliği üzerinde çalışmalısınız. "I'm an old school man" yerine daha doğal ifadeler kullanın ve ikinci cümledeki zamir ve fiil yapılarını düzeltin. Neden yazdığınızı somut bir örnekle destekleyin ve bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisi kurun.

範例: Yes, I still write physical letters because I prefer a personal touch. For instance, I write postcards to close friends on special occasions, so they feel more meaningful than a text message.

建議: Cevabınız açık ama kesinlikten kaçınıyorsunuz ve tekrarlama var. Daha doğal bir yanıt için kesinlik derecesi belirtin (e.g. mostly, mostly not) ve daha spesifik sebepler ekleyin. Bağlaçlarla argümanı genişletin ve örnek verin.

範例: Mostly not; people generally prefer digital communication nowadays because it is faster and more convenient. For example, many friends send instant messages or emails instead of writing long letters.

建議: Cümle yapısında zaman ve sözdizimi hataları var (örneğin "I still carrying" yerine "I still carry"). Cevabınızı daha akıcı hale getirmek için koşul belirten bağlaçlar kullanın ve günlük örneklerle açıklayın. Cümle sayısını 2–3'te tutun.

範例: Yes, I still carry a small notebook and a pen, but not always. For example, I take them to school or meetings, but I leave them at home when I just go out for coffee or a drink.

建議: Cevabınız kısa ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor (ör. "throw out to everywhere"). Daha açıklayıcı olun: ne yaptığınızı, nasıl oynadığınızı ve neden hoşlandığınızı belirtin. Geçmiş zamanı doğru kullanın ve bir-iki detayla zenginleştirin.

範例: As a child, I loved making paper planets and throwing them around to play games with my friends. I would color them, fold them into shapes, and pretend they were planets in a space adventure.

× Yes, I still carrying papers and pens which go out but not all the time.

✓ Yes, I still carry papers and pens when I go out, but not all the time.

The progressive form 'carrying' is incorrect here because 'still' with a habitual action requires the base form 'carry'. Also 'which go out' is ungrammatical; use a time clause 'when I go out'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and a clear subordinate clause: 'when I go out'.

× Yes, I can make a planet with paper.

✓ Yes, I can make a paper planet.

The original word order is awkward. Use a noun phrase 'paper planet' to sound natural. The modal 'can' is fine, so keep simple present ability. Suggestion: place the material adjective before the noun: 'paper planet'.

× Yes, I still write physical letters because I'm an old school man.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters because I'm old-fashioned.

'Old school man' is unnatural in English. Use the adjective 'old-fashioned' to describe preferences. Keep simple present for a habitual action. Suggestion: use standard adjectives to describe manner or preference.

× When the technology becomes to be part of this writing, this is not exactly like for me.

✓ When technology becomes part of writing, it is not really for me.

Incorrect verb phrase 'becomes to be' and awkward phrasing 'like for me'. Use 'becomes part of' and 'not really for me'. Maintain present tense for general statements. Suggestion: simplify the clause: 'When technology becomes part of writing, it is not really for me.'

× Uh, probably no. They are using a phone or phone call or messages.

✓ Uh, probably not. They use phones or messages.

Use 'not' instead of 'no' for short negative answers. 'They are using' suggests continuous action; general habit should use simple present 'use'. Also 'a phone or phone call or messages' is repetitive; simplify to 'phones or messages'. Suggestion: use simple present for general habits and concise nouns.

× They are not using the physical letters.

✓ They do not use physical letters.

For general fact/habit, use simple present 'do not use' rather than present continuous. Suggestion: use simple present to describe general trends.

× What did you like to do with paper as a child?

✓ What did you like to do with paper when you were a child?

Question asks about past; original is understandable but more natural: use 'when you were a child' rather than 'as a child' after 'did'. Suggestion: include 'when you were' for clarity in past context.

× Create a planet and throw out to everywhere.

✓ I used to make paper planets and throw them everywhere.

Original lacks subject and has incorrect verb forms and preposition 'to everywhere'. Use past habitual 'used to' and correct pronoun 'them' for 'planets', and 'throw them everywhere' without 'to'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for repeated past actions and correct object pronouns and adverbial phrases.

× If I go to school, yes, but if I'm going to drink a coffee or drink a beer now.

✓ If I go to school, yes, but if I am just going to have a coffee or a beer, then no.

Mixed tenses and informal phrasing. Use 'am going to have' for immediate plans and include 'then no' to complete the contrast. Also use 'have a coffee' or 'have a beer' idiomatically. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and complete the response.