公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, avoid repetition, correct unnatural phrases, and add one or two specific childhood details. Use a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 supporting details with linking words.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which helped me make friends and enjoy fresh air.

建議: Reduce hesitations and filler words, correct grammar (verb agreement), and give one specific routine or example when you go to the park. Keep it within 2–4 clear sentences using linking words.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they relax me. I usually go there in the evenings for a 30-minute walk, and sometimes I sit on a bench to read a novel or watch people passing by.

建議: Avoid repetition and fix sentence structure and word choice. Be specific about benefits of more parks (e.g., exercise, community space) and use linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because currently there is only one main park. More parks would give children safe places to play and provide residents with spots for exercise and socialising.

建議: Make the answer more fluent and specific: name the park if possible, say why it appeals (features, activities), and use linking words to connect reasons. Keep it to 2–4 sentences without repetition.

範例: Yes, I plan to visit a large park in Amritsar that’s on my bucket list. It is much bigger than our local park and I’m keen to go there with friends because it has lakes, walking trails and picnic areas.

× Yes, definitely. I love to go to parks.

✓ Yes, definitely. I loved going to parks.

The question asks about childhood habits (past), so the student should use past tense to match context. Use 'loved' and 'going' to express habitual past action clearly. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits ('I loved going to parks').

× I used to love to go to parks when I was a child.

✓ I used to love going to parks when I was a child.

With 'used to' it is more natural to follow with the -ing form for repeated activities ('used to love going'). Both forms are possible, but 'love going' is smoother. Suggestion: prefer 'used to' + verb-ing for routines ('used to love going').

× Even now, as I am big enough, I'd still like to go to parks in mileage time, for walking purposes, for getting fresh air, for changing my mood and environment and et cetera.

✓ Even now, since I am grown up, I still like to go to parks in my free time for walking, getting fresh air, and changing my mood and environment, etc.

Multiple issues: 'as I am big enough' is unnatural—use 'since I am grown up' (word choice). 'I'd still like' (conditional) is awkward; 'I still like' suits habitual present. 'in mileage time' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'in my free time'. 'for walking purposes' -> 'for walking'. Also list punctuation and word order improved. Suggestion: use natural phrases for adult status and free time and keep parallel structure ('for walking, getting fresh air, and changing my mood').

× Yes, I, as I said earlier, I definitely like to go to parks even now because going to parks make me feel good about everything.

✓ Yes, as I said earlier, I definitely like to go to parks even now because going to parks makes me feel good about everything.

Subject-verb agreement: 'going to parks' is singular gerund subject so verb requires third person singular 'makes' not 'make'. Also remove redundant 'I'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject ('going... makes').

× Uh, and uh, in my leisure time, I mostly go to parks for walks and umm, I go to parks, sit there in a corner and read books there for.

✓ In my leisure time, I mostly go to parks for walks; I sit in a corner and read books there.

Redundant fillers and awkward word order. 'read books there for' is incorrect word order. Use parallel clauses and proper object placement. Suggestion: remove filler words and use clear sequence: 'I go to parks for walks; I sit in a corner and read books.'

× Yes, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my country and in my city though because there is only one park that is very famous in my city.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my country and in my city because there is only one park that is very famous in my city.

Minor redundancy 'though' is unnecessary. Article use is acceptable but sentence is repetitive ('in my city' twice). Suggestion: remove 'though' and avoid repeating the same phrase.

× I want more parks for so that more people can come there and enjoy their free time and children's can play their elders can elders can enjoy their each.

✓ I want more parks so that more people can come and enjoy their free time, and children and elders can play and relax.

Problems: 'for so that' is redundant; 'children's can play their elders can elders can enjoy their each' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use quantifier structure 'more parks so that more people' and parallel noun phrases 'children and elders'. Suggestion: simplify to clear parallel structure: 'children and elders can play and relax.'

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

No correction needed. The sentence correctly asks about future intentions using 'want to'. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, I have a park where I want to go.

✓ Yes, there is a park I want to visit.

Use 'there is' for existence and 'visit' is more natural than 'go to' in this context. Also 'a park where I want to go' is grammatically acceptable but 'there is a park I want to visit' is smoother. Suggestion: use 'there is' + noun and 'visit' for destinations.

× It's like it is in my bucket list to go there and enjoy with my friends there.

✓ It's on my bucket list to go there and enjoy time with my friends.

'It's like it is in my bucket list' is awkward. Correct idiom is 'on my bucket list'. Remove redundant 'there' and use 'enjoy time with my friends.' Suggestion: use fixed expression 'on my bucket list' and avoid repeating location words.

× And it is located in Amritsar.

✓ It is located in Amritsar.

No grammatical error beyond unnecessary 'And' at start. Start sentence without conjunction. Suggestion: omit 'And' for formality.

× It is quite bigger than the park that is located in my city.

✓ It is much bigger than the park in my city.

Comparative degree: 'quite bigger' is nonstandard; use 'much bigger' or 'quite big' + 'than'. Also 'the park that is located in my city' can be simplified. Suggestion: use 'much bigger than' for clear comparison.

× So I definitely will like to go there.

✓ So I would definitely like to go there.

'Will like' is awkward; 'would like' expresses desire politely and matches conditional/wish contexts. Suggestion: use 'would like' when expressing preference.