公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Organize your reply: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you liked parks, then give one or two specific supporting details (what you liked, who you went with, how often). Use simple linking words (for example, 'because', 'so', 'but') and correct basic grammar (articles, prepositions, verb forms). Keep it to 2–4 short sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I especially enjoyed the playground because it had swings and slides. My parents and sisters usually took me there on weekends, so I looked forward to those family outings.

建議: Answer directly (Yes/No) then explain briefly with clear reasons and one specific example. Avoid vague or unclear phrases. Use simple past/present tenses correctly and linking words like 'but' or 'however' to contrast past and present feelings. Keep sentences short and coherent.

範例: Not really. I don't often go to parks now because I prefer quieter activities, but seeing children play there reminds me of my childhood. I still visit with my nephew occasionally so he can enjoy the playground.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and one consequence. Use linking words ('because', 'so', 'therefore') and correct comparative phrases (e.g., 'less crowded', 'safer'). Keep to 2–3 concise sentences and fix repetition.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they would be less crowded and therefore safer for children. With more parks, I would feel more comfortable taking my nephew for outdoor play.

建議: Start with a clear statement about your interest, then name specific parks or types of parks you want to visit and why (e.g., scenery, wildlife, history). Use correct articles and plural/singular forms and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit some famous national parks in the future, such as Yellowstone in the United States or Göreme National Park in Turkey. I want to see their landscapes and wildlife because I enjoy nature and photography.

× I really like going parks in but when I was a child especially the flight is my favorite.

✓ I really liked going to parks when I was a child; especially the playground was my favorite.

The sentence has incorrect preposition use ('going parks in' should be 'going to parks') and tense inconsistency (speaking about childhood should use past tense 'liked'). 'The flight' seems incorrect in context and likely intended 'the playground' or similar; replace with appropriate noun. Use 'when I was a child' without extra words and a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses. Suggestions: use 'going to parks', match past tense for childhood memories, and replace unclear noun with context-appropriate word.

× I don't really like it too but there is too too far away from our house so I have to go with our parents or my sisters.

✓ I didn't really like it either because it was too far away from our house, so I had to go with my parents or my sisters.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect adverb choice ('too too' and 'too' placement). For past experience use past tense 'didn't like', 'was too far away'. 'Either' is the correct word instead of 'too' when used with negatives. Also 'our parents' should be 'my parents' for speaker's perspective. Remove repeated 'too'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, use 'either' after negative, and use correct perspective ('my').

× I never really.

✓ I never really did.

The original fragment lacks a main verb or complete predicate. Adding 'did' completes the idea referring back to 'like' or the implied action. Ensure sentences include a subject and verb to be complete. Suggestions: complete fragments by supplying the verb: 'I never really did.'

× No, I'm not so, but when I see the child I really remember my old times it was not right now, not anymore.

✓ No, I don't anymore, but when I see children I really remember my childhood; those times are gone now.

The student mixes present continuous 'I'm not so' (unclear) with present simple and past references. Use 'I don't anymore' or 'I don't anymore like parks' to express current dislike. 'the child' should be plural 'children' for general reference. 'my old times' is unidiomatic; use 'my childhood' or 'those times'. Clarify 'it was not right now, not anymore' to 'those times are gone now'. Suggestions: use clear present simple for current states, pluralize when speaking generally, and use 'childhood' for past period.

× It's really weird. Before I go weird, some kind of Terence Will carried out, so I probably not choose to, but I go with my nephew.

✓ It's really strange. Before, some kind of interference happened, so I probably wouldn't choose to go alone, but I go with my nephew.

Many phrases are ungrammatical or misused: 'go weird' is incorrect — use 'It felt strange' or 'It's really strange'. 'Terence Will carried out' is unclear; likely meant 'some kind of disturbance/interference happened'. Use past tense 'happened'. 'I probably not choose to' should be 'I probably wouldn't choose to go alone'. Maintain modal 'wouldn't' for hypothetical past preference and keep infinitive 'to go'. Suggestions: replace unclear nouns with appropriate words ('disturbance'), use correct modal verbs and negation ('wouldn't'), and ensure verb forms are correct.

× It will be really good to see more parks in my city.

✓ It would be really good to have more parks in my city.

The original uses future 'will be' which is acceptable but more natural here is the conditional 'would be' to express a hypothetical desirable change. Also 'to see more parks' is less precise than 'to have more parks'. Suggestions: use 'would be' for hypothetical wishes and 'have' when referring to possession/availability of parks.

× When this happens, the parks become not too much crowded so it will it will be more safe, it will be more good.

✓ If this happens, the parks will not be too crowded, so they will be safer and better.

Several issues: word order 'not too much crowded' should be 'not too crowded'; repetition 'it will it will' removed; 'more safe' is better as comparative 'safer'; 'more good' is unidiomatic — use 'better'. Use conditional 'If this happens' for clarity. Suggestions: use correct adjective forms ('safer', 'better'), proper negation placement, and avoid repetition.

× So I can't take my nephew with not trust issues.

✓ So I can take my nephew without trust issues.

Phrase 'with not trust issues' is ungrammatical. Use 'without' to indicate absence. Also 'can't' contradicts intended meaning; context suggests ability to take nephew is possible, so use 'can'. If intended meaning was inability, rephrase accordingly. Ensure pronoun/possessive clarity if needed. Suggestions: use 'without trust issues' and ensure modal verb matches intended meaning ('can' vs 'can't').

× I'll never think about that before, but there is a national parks in capitals in like America or Turkey.

✓ I never thought about that before, but there are national parks in capitals in countries like America or Turkey.

Tense should be past simple for prior thoughts: 'I never thought'. 'There is a national parks' has subject-verb agreement and article errors: 'parks' is plural so use 'there are' and no 'a'. 'in capitals in like America or Turkey' is awkward; use 'in capitals of countries like America or Turkey' or better 'in capital cities of countries such as the United States or Turkey'. Also 'America' is vague; use 'the United States'. Suggestions: match tense, ensure 'there is/are' agrees with singular/plural, and use proper country names and prepositions.

× I really would like to see them.

✓ I would really like to see them.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but word order can be improved for naturalness: place 'really' after the auxiliary 'would'. No article issues remain but adjustment improves fluency. Suggestions: use natural adverb placement: 'I would really like to see them.'