公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct the grammar and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid wrong proper nouns (Paris vs park), and give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, on weekends I often played football with my friends and we would have picnics under the trees, which helped me relax and make close friendships.

建議: Reduce small grammar mistakes and improve coherence with linking words. Use correct verb forms, plural/singular agreement, and a clearer sequence (when and why). Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks in my free time. Often I bring snacks and my children to the nearby park so we can play together and relax outdoors.

建議: Make the sentence structure correct and avoid invented phrases like “park rail.” Give a clear reason and use linking words to connect ideas. Use one sentence for opinion and one for supporting reason.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. More parks would provide people with peaceful places to exercise and spend time with their families, which would improve community life.

建議: Use natural phrasing and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example of what you want to see. Avoid awkward phrases like “decorate of different flower plants.”

範例: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I would like to visit parks in other cities or countries. For instance, I am interested in botanical gardens to see different flower arrangements and landscaping styles.

× Just I did love to go to Paris when I was a kid, especially on the weekends to relax and enjoy playing with my friends.

✓ I did love going to parks when I was a kid, especially on weekends, to relax and play with my friends.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a wrong place name (Paris) likely intended as 'parks'. 'Just I did love' is unnatural; use 'I did love' or better 'I loved' or 'I did love going to parks'. 'Go to' + noun can be changed to 'going to' for natural expression. Remove 'the' before weekends and change 'enjoy playing with my friends' to 'play with my friends' for simplicity and parallel structure.

× Absolutely, I still do like going to parks, especially during my free time. I sometime bring some foods and snacks and my kids to the park nearby my house.

✓ Absolutely, I still like going to parks, especially during my free time. I sometimes bring some food and snacks and my kids to the park near my house.

Use simple present 'I still like' rather than 'do like' for normal statements. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'Foods' is uncountable in this context; use 'food'. 'Nearby my house' is incorrect preposition use; use 'near my house' or 'nearby, to the park near my house.' These changes correct adverb form, noun countability, and preposition choice.

× Yes, I would. That would be something that absolutely great if we have more park rail, my city so that people can have more places to enjoy and spend time with their family.

✓ Yes, I would. It would be absolutely great if we had more parks in my city so that people could have more places to enjoy and spend time with their families.

Multiple issues: word order and missing verb form ('That would be something that absolutely great' is ungrammatical). Use conditional past 'if we had' to match 'would' in the main clause. 'Park rail' is incorrect phrase; likely 'parks'. Use plural 'parks'. 'My city' should be placed as 'in my city'. 'Can' shifts to 'could' to match conditional. 'Family' plural 'families' is more natural when referring to many people.

× To be honest, I don't have any choice in particulars, but I would love to explore other parks in other cities or even in other countries to see how they decorate of different flower plants.

✓ To be honest, I don't have any particular choice, but I would love to explore parks in other cities or even other countries to see how they arrange different flowers and plants.

'Any choice in particulars' is incorrect phrasing; use 'any particular choice' or 'any specific choice'. 'Explore other parks in other cities' is repetitive; 'parks in other cities' is sufficient. 'Decorate of different flower plants' is ungrammatical—use 'arrange different flowers and plants' or 'decorate with different flowers and plants'. Also prefer 'flowers and plants' rather than 'flower plants'.