公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is largely unintelligible and off-topic. Focus on giving a clear, direct topic sentence about whether you liked parks as a child, then add one or two short supporting details (what you did there or why you liked them). Keep to 2–4 sentences and use simple, correct grammar. Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a safe place to play. I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, and I remember exploring the trees and ponds with my friends.

建議: The answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Answer directly: say whether you still like parks now, then give a specific reason or example. Use present tense for current habits and linkers such as “but” or “because.” Keep sentences short and coherent.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because they help me relax after work. For example, I walk in the park twice a week to get fresh air and clear my mind.

建議: This reply is fragmented and lacks clear content. State your position (yes or no) clearly, then give one or two specific reasons (e.g., health, community space) and, if possible, a suggestion for improvement. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” to make the answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we need green spaces for exercise and family activities. For instance, adding small neighborhood parks would give children safe places to play and encourage people to walk more.

建議: The answer is confusing and contains irrelevant phrases. Give a clear, specific example of a park you want to visit (name or type), explain why, and mention when you might go. Use 2–3 concise sentences and avoid unrelated words.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit a national park in the future, such as (insert park name) because I enjoy hiking and nature photography. I hope to go there next year with my family for a week-long trip.

× Yes, I do love going to.

✓ Yes, I do love going to parks.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the object of the verb phrase 'going to'. Add 'parks' to complete the meaning and match the examiner's question about parks. Use 'do' for emphasis correctly followed by the full verb phrase.

× His mom just thinks I don't participate in the fraternities.

✓ My mom just thinks I don't participate in fraternities.

The pronoun 'His' is incorrect because the speaker refers to their own mother; use 'My'. Also, 'the fraternities' is unnatural here; use 'fraternities' without 'the' unless referring to specific ones. Ensure pronoun matches the speaker.

× You weren't going to do.

✓ You weren't going to go?

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. If asking a question about the examiner's intention, use 'go' as the verb and question mark. Maintain appropriate subject-verb order for a question in past continuous/intent form.

× Well right now as you may have older than my.

✓ Well right now I am older than I used to be.

The original mixes fragments and incorrect possessive pronoun 'my'. To express current age relative to the past, use present simple 'I am' and the comparative phrase 'older than I used to be'. Keep tense consistent.

× That my then I used to go.

✓ Back then I used to go.

The original word order is incorrect. Use the common phrase 'Back then' followed by 'I used to go' to indicate a past habitual action. This corrects structure and clarifies meaning.

× I think yes, only one.

✓ Yes, I think only one.

The placement of 'yes' and 'only one' is awkward. Place 'yes' before the clause and remove comma, or say 'I think there is only one'. If referring to parks, use 'there is only one park'.

× During a minute.

✓ For a minute.

'During a minute' is unnatural in English; use 'for a minute' to indicate duration. However, the phrase remains vague; specify the action that lasted a minute to be clear.

× But they are not.

✓ But they are not well maintained.

'They are not' is incomplete. Add a complement that explains what is meant; here, 'well maintained' fits if speaking about park condition. Ensure the sentence completes the thought.

× They did that.

✓ They did that before.

The sentence is terse and contextless. If referring to a past action, add a time reference like 'before' to clarify. Ensure past tense 'did' matches intended meaning.

× They ****.

✓ They closed it.

'They ****' is censored and incomplete. Replace with a clear past tense verb that fits context, such as 'closed it' if parks were closed. Provide a complete clause.

× Yes, there is ultimate dream part.

✓ Yes, there is an ultimate dream park.

Use the existential 'there is' with the indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun 'park'. Also correct 'part' to 'park'. Ensure noun forms and articles are correct.

× Start a 5 minutes.

✓ It starts in five minutes.

Use 'it starts' to indicate when something will begin and 'five minutes' without 'a'. Spell out or write the number appropriately and use plural 'minutes'.

× I wanted the coder to explain the real estate.

✓ I wanted the counselor to explain the rules.

The original phrase 'coder' and 'real estate' seem semantically odd in this context; if the student meant someone to explain park rules, 'counselor' or 'guide' and 'rules' fit. Also past tense 'wanted' is acceptable if referring to a past desire. If 'coder' was intended, clarify meaning. Ensure nouns match context.

× Internet Explorer and my family and friends.

✓ My family and friends and I would go together.

The fragment 'Internet Explorer and my family and friends' is incoherent. Replace with a clear noun phrase indicating who will go. Use correct pronoun order 'my family and friends and I' and a verb to complete the sentence.