公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and plural forms, and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Because I grew up in a subdivision with few green spaces, trips to the park were special occasions where I could play on swings and explore with my friends.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, combine similar activities using linking words, and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'sit on benches', 'few people' vs 'not many people'). Be more specific about when or how often you go.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go several times a week to jog, walk or simply sit on a bench and watch people, and this helps me relax because the parks are usually not very crowded.

建議: Respond directly with a concise topic sentence, fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'more parks than malls' or 'more malls than parks'), and add a specific reason or example using a linking word to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Because it is highly urbanized and has more malls than parks, adding green spaces would give residents quiet places to relax and improve air quality.

建議: Start with a direct statement, correct the park name and phrasing ('Central Park in New York'), and give a brief specific reason why you want to visit using a linking word to add coherence.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit parks abroad, especially Central Park in New York. I want to see its famous landmarks and wide lawns because I enjoy large urban parks that host concerts and outdoor activities.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child since I grew up in a subdivision.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child since I grew up in a subdivision.

The sentence refers to past habitual action 'as a child', so past tense 'liked' is required. Also 'going to park' needs plural or article; use 'parks' for general places. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and plural when speaking generally about types of places.

× We have a little to no parks in our neighborhood, so going to the parks really excites and makes me happy.

✓ We had few or no parks in our neighborhood, so going to parks really excited me and made me happy.

When referring to countable plural nouns, use 'few' or 'few or no' rather than 'a little'. Also maintain past tense for childhood. Verb choices 'excited' and 'made' should be past. Avoid definite article 'the' unless referring to specific parks; use plural 'parks' for general meaning.

× Yes, I still like going to the parks.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks.

When speaking generally about visiting parks, omit 'the' and use plural 'parks' or use 'the park' if you mean a specific park. The present tense 'like' is correct for current preference, so only article use needed.

× I usually go to the park in order to jog or walk around or just chill in the benches and watch people.

✓ I usually go to the park to jog or walk around or just sit on the benches and watch people.

Use 'the park' if referring to a specific local park; 'in order to' is wordy so 'to' suffices. 'Chill in the benches' is incorrect: use 'sit on the benches' or 'chill on the benches'. Preposition 'on' is required with 'bench'. Also 'chill' is informal; 'relax' is an alternative.

× Going to the park makes me feel relaxed because there are a few people around.

✓ Going to the park makes me feel relaxed because there are only a few people around.

The present tense is fine for current feelings. Add 'only' to clarify low number is the reason. 'A few' is acceptable but 'only a few' emphasizes sparsity.

× I live in a highly urbanized city and we have more malls than park.

✓ I live in a highly urbanized city and we have more malls than parks.

Compare countable nouns in plural: 'parks' not singular 'park'. Use plural after 'more than' when comparing counts of items.

× I think it would be very great if we'll have more parks in our city for people to come enjoy and chill in peace.

✓ I think it would be great if we had more parks in our city for people to enjoy and relax peacefully.

In conditional statements contrary to present facts, use past subjunctive 'had' after 'if' with 'would' in main clause. 'We'll have' is incorrect here. Also 'very great' is awkward; 'great' suffices. 'Come enjoy and chill in peace' is informal and ungrammatical: use 'enjoy and relax peacefully'.

× Yes, if possible, I would very like to go to other parks and other cities or countries.

✓ Yes, if possible, I would really like to visit other parks in other cities or countries.

'Would very like' is not idiomatic; use 'would really like' or 'would very much like'. Use 'visit' rather than 'go to' for places in this context. Clarify 'other parks in other cities or countries'.

× My dream is to visit the New York Central Park, which is the most famous park not just in the US but also in the world.

✓ My dream is to visit Central Park in New York, which is one of the most famous parks not just in the US but in the world.

The proper name is 'Central Park' rather than 'the New York Central Park'. Use 'one of the most famous parks' rather than absolute 'the most famous' unless claiming it's singularly top. Also 'not just in the US but also in the world' is redundant; 'not just in the US but in the world' is smoother.