公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce las muletillas ("uh", "um", repeticiones) y corrige la gramática; use una frase temática clara seguida de detalles específicos. Mantén la respuesta natural y breve (máx. 5 oraciones). Por ejemplo, diga directamente que no le gustaban los parques de niño, explique la razón concreta (calor y malestar) y añada una breve consecuencia o ejemplo.

範例: I didn't enjoy going to parks as a child because it was often scorching hot and I would feel nauseous. My parents still took me, and they had to persuade me to stay by offering shady spots or cold drinks. As a result, I usually left early and preferred indoor activities.

建議: Elimine pausas y muletillas; estructure con una oración principal clara y uno o dos detalles específicos sobre la frecuencia y la razón. Use conectores simples para la coherencia (for example, "because", "so").

範例: My attitude has changed because I'm trying to lead a healthier lifestyle, so I often go for walks in parks. I usually visit them three times a week to exercise and enjoy fresh air, which helps my mood and energy.

建議: Sea más conciso y evite redundancias. Empiece con una oración clara que responda sí/no y explique por qué con detalles específicos (beneficios como sombra, espacios verdes, salud). Use un conector para la esperanza o predicción.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks because greenery provides shade and helps people cool down in hot weather. I hope the city will create more small parks and tree-lined streets each year to improve residents' health and comfort.

建議: Evite repeticiones y muletillas; estructure con una oración temática clara identificando el parque y un motivo específico por ir (paisaje, historia, película). Añada un detalle concreto (nombre o ubicación más precisa, cuándo planea ir) para enriquecer la respuesta.

範例: Yes — there's a famous park in western China that I want to visit because of its stunning scenery and cultural history. It's on my bucket list, and I plan to go in the next few years to see the filming locations and take photos of the dramatic landscapes.

× To be honest, I, I, I didn't used to like it because, uh, usually when we went to parks, it was scorching hot outside, so I would feel nauseated, I would feel sickened, uh, but any, but anyway, my parents would coax me into.

✓ To be honest, I didn't use to like it because usually when we went to parks it was scorching hot outside, so I would feel nauseated and sick, but my parents would coax me into going.

The phrase 'didn't used to' is incorrect; after 'did' the base form 'use' should be used. Remove filler words and redundant commas, change 'feel sickened' to 'feel sick' for natural usage, and complete the phrasal verb 'coax me into' with 'going'. Suggestions: use 'didn't use to' for past habitual dislikes, avoid filler repetitions, and ensure verbs after 'did' are in base form.

× Now, umm, my outlook has changed as I'm trying to, as I'm aiming for healthier lifestyle, so I, uh, try to go out, uh, and have walks, uh, in parks, Uh, so I definitely like, uh, going there and I do it often and.

✓ Now my outlook has changed because I'm aiming for a healthier lifestyle, so I try to go out and take walks in parks. I definitely like going there and I do it often.

Use 'a healthier lifestyle' with the article 'a'. 'Have walks' is unnatural; use 'take walks'. Remove repeated fillers and incomplete conjunction 'and' at end. Suggestions: include the article before 'healthier lifestyle', use natural collocations like 'take walks', and finish sentences completely.

× I do usually I like greenery and they provide also, uh, shades so that you can, uh, cool down a bit, uh, when it's, uh, hot outside. So, umm, oh, hopefully it will they, they will get more and more each each year by year in my city.

✓ I usually like greenery and it also provides shade so you can cool down a bit when it's hot outside. Hopefully they will build more parks year by year in my city.

Pronoun reference is unclear: 'they' was used for 'greenery' which is singular/uncountable; use 'it' or rephrase. 'Shades' should be singular 'shade' in this context. Repeated words removed. 'Hopefully it will they, they will get more' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'Hopefully they will build more parks'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents, use correct singular/uncountable forms, and avoid repetition.

× I saw a magnificent and incredible park in China in the West part of it and I'll definitely and I, I think I will definitely go there as it's one of my, it's in my bucket list. Uh, actually, umm, there is a scene that was shot there in the 80s, I believe, uh, from.

✓ I saw a magnificent park in the western part of China and I will definitely go there; it's on my bucket list. Actually, there is a scene that was shot there in the 80s, I believe.

'West part of it' is awkward; use 'western part of China'. Remove duplicated 'definitely' and repetitions. Use 'it's on my bucket list' instead of 'it's in my bucket list'. Finish the last clause properly. Suggestions: use correct prepositional phrases ('in the western part of'), avoid repetition, and use fixed expressions like 'on my bucket list'.