公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrases and incorrect collocations (e.g., “sore beds”). Use linking words like “for example” or “in summer” to organize details.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My family visited them regularly — for example, in spring we flew kites together, and in summer we climbed the hills and had picnics on the grass.

建議: Make sentences grammatically consistent and avoid repetition. Use a clear contrast phrase (e.g., “nowadays” or “these days”) and give one or two precise activities you do now. Keep to a maximum of five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but my activities have changed. As a child I used to run around, play games and hike with my parents; nowadays I prefer sitting on a bench and watching the sunset.

建議: Answer directly and avoid unclear phrasing. Use a clear reason and one concrete example. Correct grammar (e.g., “there is no conflict” not “there is conflicts”) and finish your sentences. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I would. I live in Shanghai, and I believe having more parks would improve residents’ quality of life because they provide green space and relaxation. For example, Central Park in New York is a great urban refuge for locals and visitors.

建議: Be concise and avoid fillers (“like”, “umm”). State a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with correct adjectives (e.g., “exceptional” not “exceptionally” at sentence end). Use linking words such as “because” or “also” and complete each sentence.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. I want to go because its natural, peaceful setting is unusual for a major city, and I’ve heard the snowy winter scenes there are truly exceptional.

× Yes, I enjoyed very much going to the park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to the park very much when I was a child.

The adverb phrase 'very much' should modify the verb 'enjoyed' and is more naturally placed after the verb phrase 'enjoyed going to the park'. Moving the adverb improves word order and fluency. Suggestion: Place adverbs of degree after the full verb phrase: 'enjoyed going to the park very much.'

× In spring, my parents and I would go to the park and fly a kite together, and in summer we would climb up the hills and rest with a couple of sore beds together.

✓ In spring, my parents and I would go to the park and fly a kite together, and in summer we would climb the hills and rest on a couple of soft beds together.

The phrase 'climb up the hills' is acceptable but 'climb the hills' is more natural. 'a couple of sore beds' is incorrect: 'sore' describes feeling, not beds; the intended adjective is likely 'soft'. Also 'rest with' should be 'rest on'. Correcting article and preposition use and choosing the right adjective fixes meaning. Suggestion: Use appropriate adjectives and prepositions: 'rest on a couple of soft beds.'

× When I was a child, I like to run, to play and to play, like hike and seed with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to run, to play and to hike with my parents.

The clause refers to past habits, so verbs should be in the past tense ('liked', 'hiked'/'to hike'). The original repeats 'to play' and includes 'seed' which is incorrect word choice. Remove repetition and use the correct verb 'hike'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits and avoid repetition: 'When I was a child, I liked to run, to play and to hike with my parents.'

× Like I used to move a lot, but nowadays I'd rather enjoy sitting quietly on a bench and watch a full sunset.

✓ I used to move a lot, but nowadays I'd rather enjoy sitting quietly on a bench and watching a full sunset.

Beginning with 'Like' is colloquial and unnecessary; start with 'I used to'. Also, after 'enjoy' the gerund ('watching') is required, not the base verb 'watch'. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'enjoy' and avoid filler 'Like': 'I'd rather enjoy sitting... and watching a full sunset.'

× Yes, I still like going to the parks now, but the things that I would do inside the park would be very different from what I did when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now, but the things I do in parks are very different from what I did when I was a child.

Mixing conditional 'would' with present reference is confusing. Use present tense 'do' for current habits. Also 'going to the parks' sounds odd; 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' is better. Simplify the clause for clarity. Suggestion: Use present simple for current habits: 'I still like going to parks now, but the things I do in parks are very different from what I did as a child.'

× When I was a child, I like to run, to play and to play, like hike and seed with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to run, to play and to hike with my parents.

The word 'with' is correct for doing activities together, but 'seed' is not the correct verb. This suggestion consolidates previous corrections: remove incorrect verbs and ensure correct preposition 'with' is used. Suggestion: Use correct verbs and prepositions: 'liked to run, to play and to hike with my parents.'

× Yes, very much exactly. I live in a big city of Shanghai, but I don't think there is conflicts between having many parks and also beautiful city views inside big cities such as Shanghai.

✓ Yes, very much. I live in the big city of Shanghai, but I don't think there are conflicts between having many parks and maintaining beautiful city views in large cities such as Shanghai.

'Very much exactly' is awkward; 'very much' suffices. Use 'the big city of Shanghai' or 'the city of Shanghai'. 'There is conflicts' has article/number agreement errors: use 'there are conflicts'. 'Also beautiful city views inside big cities' is wordy; 'maintaining beautiful city views in large cities' is clearer. Suggestion: Use correct number agreement with 'there are' and simplify phrasing.'

× There is one very famous example is the Central Park in New York.

✓ One very famous example is Central Park in New York.

The original contains a redundant 'There is' plus 'is', resulting in a double verb. Remove 'There is' to form a correct cleft sentence: 'One very famous example is Central Park in New York.' Suggestion: Avoid redundant verbs: use 'One very famous example is ...'.

× I think Central Park provides a very good getaway for the.

✓ I think Central Park provides a very good getaway for the city.

The sentence ends with 'the' followed by nothing, leaving the object incomplete. Add the missing noun 'city' (or 'people') to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have a complete object: '...getaway for the city.'

× Yes, I think the park that I would like to visit the most in the future is the Central Park in New York City.

✓ Yes, I think the park I would like to visit most in the future is Central Park in New York City.

'Would like to' is acceptable, but 'the Central Park' is incorrect article use; proper name is 'Central Park'. Also 'the park that I would like to visit the most' is wordy; simplify to 'the park I would like to visit most.' Suggestion: Use correct proper noun without 'the' and simplify modal phrase.

× Like I have just mentioned umm.

✓ As I have just mentioned, umm...

Starting with 'Like' is colloquial and can be considered a filler; 'As I have just mentioned' is a more appropriate linking phrase. Also this utterance is a fragment; adding a comma and ellipsis indicates hesitation but maintain grammatical introductory phrase. Suggestion: Use formal linking phrases in speaking tests: 'As I have just mentioned...'.

× The reason why I like Central Park is it's natural and unique setting inside the world's biggest city.

✓ The reason I like Central Park is its natural and unique setting inside one of the world's biggest cities.

Use possessive 'its' not contraction 'it's' (it is). 'The world's biggest city' is incorrect because New York is one of the world's biggest cities; use 'one of the world's biggest cities' for accuracy. Also avoid 'the reason why' redundancy; 'the reason I like' is cleaner. Suggestion: Use 'its' for possession and accurate comparative phrasing: 'its natural and unique setting inside one of the world's biggest cities.'

× And also I heard that the snowy view of Central Park in winter is exceptionally.

✓ I have also heard that Central Park's snowy scenery in winter is exceptional.

'And also' is redundant; 'I have also heard' is better. 'the snowy view ... is exceptionally' is wrong because 'exceptionally' is an adverb and needs an adjective to modify; use the adjective 'exceptional' or an adverb with an adjective: 'exceptionally beautiful.' Also 'snowy scenery' or 'snowy view' with proper possessive is clearer. Suggestion: Use correct adjective/adverb form: 'is exceptional' or 'is exceptionally beautiful.'