公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise, fix articles and prepositions, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example using a linking word.

範例: Yes, I did. I often went to the local park with my family to play and relax. For example, we used to have picnics near the pond every Sunday, which I always enjoyed because I could feed the ducks and play on the swings.

建議: Remove hesitations and use correct verb forms and articles. Provide a clearer reason and a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, I do. I still enjoy going to parks with my family because they are peaceful and we can breathe fresh air. For this reason, we often choose parks that have forested areas and walking trails.

建議: Avoid filler words and grammar mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence, then give two specific benefits using linking words (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Correct plural and article errors.

範例: Yes, I would. I think more parks would improve people's mood and physical health because they provide space for exercise and relaxation. For example, having small neighborhood parks would encourage residents to walk or do outdoor activities regularly.

建議: Make the sentence fluent and correct: use proper infinitives and articles, remove hesitation, and give a specific reason or example. Mention a particular national park and one concrete feature you want to see.

範例: In the future, I would like to visit a national park in the USA, such as Yellowstone, because I have heard it has spectacular landscapes and geothermal features. For instance, I want to see the geysers and the wide open valleys with wildlife.

× When I was a child I used to go to park with my family for playing and for relaxing on the park.

✓ When I was a child I used to go to the park with my family to play and to relax in the park.

The noun 'park' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific kind of place in general context. 'Go to park' is incorrect; use 'go to the park'. Also 'for playing' and 'for relaxing' are awkward after 'go'; use the infinitive 'to play' and 'to relax'. Use 'in the park' rather than 'on the park' because activities occur in a park, not on it.

× I still like going to parks with my family, uh, for relax, uh, just umm, breathing clean air.

✓ I still like going to parks with my family to relax and just breathe clean air.

After 'like' and a purpose phrase, use the infinitive 'to relax' rather than the base form 'relax'. Also 'breathing' should be the base verb 'breathe' when listing activities with 'to': 'to relax and to breathe' (the second 'to' can be omitted). This keeps parallel structure.

× Uh, that's why we usually go to the, uh, forest area parks.

✓ That's why we usually go to forest-area parks.

'Forest area parks' is incorrect word order and needs a hyphenated compound adjective 'forest-area parks' or 'parks in forest areas'. Use 'to' with 'go to parks' is fine; remove extra commas.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city. Uh, parks influence a lot of umm, positive effect to the, uh, people's mood and health.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city. Parks have a lot of positive effects on people's mood and health.

'Influence a lot of positive effect to' is ungrammatical. Use the verb 'have' with 'effects' or 'have a positive effect on'. 'People's' does not need 'the'. Preposition 'on' is required: 'effects on' or 'effect on'.

× That's why uh, we need to more park. We need to more green area in our city.

✓ That's why we need more parks. We need more green areas in our city.

'Need to more park' is incorrect. 'More' should modify a plural noun: 'more parks' and 'more green areas'. Alternatively, 'we need more park space' would work. Remove the unnecessary infinitive 'to' after 'need' in this context.

× In the future, I would like to see and going to, uh, National Park in USA because I heard about that park before, uh, it, it's so beautiful and a lot of umm, umm, beautiful landscape.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit a national park in the USA because I have heard about it before; it is very beautiful and has a lot of beautiful landscapes.

After 'would like' use the infinitive 'to visit' (not 'see and going to'). 'National Park in USA' needs an article: 'a national park in the USA'. Use present perfect 'have heard' for experience up to now. 'It, it's' is redundant; use 'it is' or 'it's'. 'A lot of beautiful landscape' should be 'a lot of beautiful landscapes' or 'beautiful scenery'. Also use 'has' to show possession: 'has a lot of ...'.