视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words, and avoid fillers like "uh."

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing new scenery. For example, when I travel to a new place, I try to find a good viewpoint to capture the landscape so I can remember the moment and share it with friends.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct comparison structures and reduce repetition. Give one specific reason and one concrete example, linked clearly.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because mountains and forests surrounded by trees make me feel peaceful. For instance, a view of rice terraces at sunset calms me much more than a busy city skyline.

建議: Correct grammar (singular/plural, word order) and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear statement, then give specific examples and a brief reason using linking words.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because the Philippines, as an archipelago, has beautiful beaches and dramatic mountains. For example, places like Palawan and the Cordilleras offer unique coastal and mountain scenery that tourists often come to see.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially on the scenery that is new to me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially scenery that is new to me.

Using 'on the scenery' is incorrect preposition and article usage; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the' or 'on' here. Remove 'on the' to make the phrase natural: 'especially scenery that is new to me.'

× For example, we are when we are traveling to a new place, I really would like to find a good spot to take a picture of the scenery in order to seize the moment or uh, get a memory from using a photo.

✓ For example, when we travel to a new place, I like to find a good spot to take a picture to seize the moment and keep the memory.

Original sentence has redundant phrase 'we are when we are' and awkward wording 'get a memory from using a photo.' Also tense and phrasing should be simple present for habitual action: 'when we travel' and 'I like to find.' Use 'seize the moment and keep the memory' for natural expression and conciseness.

× I prefer views in rural areas than in urban areas because I think I'm seeing mountains of forest and just a scenery that is surrounded by trees keeps makes me feel warm and at peace inside.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because seeing forests, mountains, and scenery surrounded by trees makes me feel warm and at peace inside.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B' (preposition error). 'Just a scenery that is surrounded by trees keeps makes me' contains extra words and wrong verb combination; choose a single verb 'makes me'. Also 'mountains of forest' is unnatural; use 'forests and mountains' or 'forests and mountains' and change 'those' to refer to views in urban areas.

× And I think having a city in the backyard is not good.

✓ And I think having a city nearby is not good.

'In the backyard' is literal and sounds odd for describing a city; use 'nearby' or 'in the background'. This fixes preposition/idiom misuse and makes the meaning clear.

× I prefer views in my own countries than in other countries because the Philippines with this archipelago we have lots of nice beaches and also steep mountains that provides a great scenery on which tourists just come to the Philippines to just witness the views.

✓ I prefer views in my own country to those in other countries because the Philippines, as an archipelago, has lots of nice beaches and steep mountains that provide great scenery, so tourists come to the Philippines to see these views.

Use 'country' (singular) when referring to 'my own country.' Also use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'than.' Verb agreement: 'mountains that provides' should be 'mountains that provide' (plural subject with plural verb). 'Has' not 'have' when referring to 'the Philippines' as a singular country in this context; rephrase for clarity and remove redundant 'just' words.