视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and clear: answer directly with a topic sentence, avoid informal contractions/colloquialisms, correct unclear phrases (e.g. “install”), and add one brief specific reason with a linking word. Keep to under five sentences.

範例: I didn't use to, but recently I've started to enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I'm preparing a photography portfolio, so taking photos helps me practice composition and light. As a result, I find the process quite rewarding.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, use a linking word to compare, and give one specific reason and brief example. Avoid awkward phrasing like “to take picture of them.”

範例: I like both, but I prefer rural views. Because the countryside often has quieter scenery and natural details like rolling hills and old farmhouses, it's more pleasant to photograph. For instance, I enjoy capturing misty mornings over fields.

建議: Give a direct balanced answer: state a clear preference or say you have no strong preference, then use linking words and specific reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like “they've got me.” Mention concrete details about places you want to visit.

範例: I enjoy the landscapes in my own country, but I also want to photograph places abroad. For example, I would love to visit Italy for its historic architecture and France for its charming streets, because these locations offer different light and textures compared with home.

× I didn't really, but I'm starting to enjoy it because I'm gonna work on my install and taking pictures is a very shining part in that process.

✓ I didn't really use to, but I'm starting to enjoy it because I'm going to work on my installation and taking pictures is a very important part of that process.

This sentence has multiple issues: 'I didn't really' is a fragment lacking the verb 'use to' for past habits (sentence structure error). 'gonna' is informal; use 'going to' for correct future tense. 'install' is incorrect noun here; 'installation' fits context. 'shining part' is unnatural collocation; 'important part' is correct. Also preposition 'in that process' should be 'of that process'. Suggestion: express past habit as 'I didn't really use to', avoid contractions like 'gonna', choose correct noun forms and prepositions.

× I guess both of them are fine, but to be honest, rural areas are more pleasant and more beautiful to take picture of them.

✓ I guess both are fine, but to be honest, rural areas are more pleasant and more beautiful to take pictures of.

Errors: 'both of them' is unnecessary after 'I guess both' (wordiness). 'to take picture of them' has incorrect singular 'picture' and redundant pronoun 'them'. Use plural 'pictures' and omit the final 'them' because 'take pictures of' already requires an object (which is 'rural areas') or can be implied. Also word order 'to take pictures of' is correct. Suggestion: use 'take pictures of' and avoid redundant pronouns.

× Oh, there are many beautiful spots in our country and I really like them. But after all, I want to visit whole world and take picture of other places too.

✓ Oh, there are many beautiful spots in our country and I really like them. But after all, I want to visit the whole world and take pictures of other places too.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'whole world' (article error / preposition-related placement). 'take picture of' should be plural 'take pictures of'. Suggestion: use 'the whole world' and plural 'pictures' when speaking generally.

× For example, I really like to go to Italy or France or Mexico. I think they've got me.

✓ For example, I would really like to go to Italy, France, or Mexico. I think those countries would appeal to me.

'I really like to go' is acceptable but 'would really like to go' better matches the desire and polite register (tense/modal nuance). Listing countries needs commas. 'I think they've got me' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended meaning is 'they would appeal to me' or 'I would enjoy them'. Suggest rephrasing to express intended meaning clearly.