视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and complete your sentence. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also finish your final idea so it is understandable.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they remind me of happy moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and parks, and later I look at these photos to cheer myself up when I feel down.

建議: Give a direct answer first, avoid repetition and fillers, then give a specific reason with supporting detail using a linking word. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'greenery is' or 'green spaces').

範例: I prefer rural views. Because rural areas have peaceful scenery and more green spaces, I find them relaxing and better for landscape photography.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, reduce repetition and fillers, and provide a specific contrast or reason using linking words. Mention one concrete example of what you expect to see abroad.

範例: I like mountain views and have visited many in my country, but I would also like to see mountains abroad. For instance, I want to compare the Himalayan scenery in India with the Alps in Europe to notice differences in landscape and culture.

× Yes, of course, I love taking pictures of different views because, uh, it is the activity which reminds me the good time and uh, I always want to keep the good views in my memory, so whenever I feel sad, I look at the.

✓ Yes, of course. I love taking pictures of different views because it is an activity that reminds me of good times, and I always want to keep beautiful views in my memory, so whenever I feel sad, I look at them.

The sentence uses incorrect or missing pronouns and has awkward noun phrases. 'the activity which' is better as 'an activity that'; 'reminds me the good time' should be 'reminds me of good times' using the correct preposition and plural. 'the good views' is vague; 'beautiful views' is more natural. The final clause ends abruptly without an object; add 'them' to refer back to 'pictures' or 'views'. Suggestion: use 'that' for defining clauses, 'remind someone of something', ensure pronouns refer clearly and sentences are complete.

× Both views are, uh, good, but as far as my, uh, preference, I will love to, uh, love to visit rural areas for views because, uh, the scenery view is good there and uh, the greenery are.

✓ Both kinds of views are good, but as for my preference, I would prefer to visit rural areas for the views because the scenery is beautiful there and the greenery is plentiful.

Problems include article use and noun number. 'Both views are good' is acceptable but 'Both kinds of views' is clearer. 'As far as my preference' should be 'as for my preference'. Use 'would prefer' or 'I prefer' rather than 'I will love to love to'. 'The scenery view is good' is unidiomatic; use 'the scenery is beautiful'. 'the greenery are' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'greenery' is uncountable, so use 'is' or 'is plentiful'. Suggestion: choose correct verb forms ('prefer'/'would prefer'), use correct articles and treat 'greenery' as uncountable.

× See, I am a person who love to see mountains.

✓ See, I am a person who loves to see mountains.

Subject-verb agreement: in relative clauses with 'who' referring to 'I', the verb must agree with the subject 'I/person'. Here the verb should be 'loves' because 'a person who' takes third person singular. Suggestion: use 'loves' with 'a person who', or rephrase 'I love to see mountains.'

× So I have visited all, almost all the scenes, almost all the areas where I can uh, see the different scenes of mountains.

✓ So I have visited almost all the places where I can see different mountain scenes.

Redundant and awkward pluralization: 'scenes' and 'areas' repeated; 'places' is more natural. 'different scenes of mountains' should be 'different mountain scenes'. 'Almost all the scenes, almost all the areas' is repetitive. Suggestion: simplify to 'almost all the places' and use correct noun forms.

× Now I will love to go abroad and see what are the differences uh, from India to abroad.

✓ Now I would like to go abroad and see what the differences are between India and other countries.

'I will love to' is an incorrect modal/auxiliary usage; use 'I would like to' or 'I want to'. Word order in a question-like clause is wrong in a statement: 'see what are the differences' should be 'see what the differences are'. 'from India to abroad' is awkward; use 'between India and other countries' or 'between India and abroad' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite desire, correct word order for indirect questions, and 'between X and Y' for comparisons.