视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: The answer is natural and clear, but a bit repetitive (repeating love/taking photos). Reduce redundancy, start with a topic sentence, add one specific supporting detail (when/what you photograph) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it to 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes — I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and city skylines to remember each trip. Because my phone acts like a visual diary, I often organize the photos by location so I can easily revisit those memories.

建議: Good idea and emotion conveyed, but answer is wordy and contains repetition ('because' used several times, 'nature' repeated). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid filler phrases like 'if I am to choose' and contractions like 'gonna' in formal test.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones. For instance, I especially like photographing mountain landscapes because they feel peaceful, and the wide open spaces help me relax and focus on composition.

建議: Answer is personal and specific, which is good. Reduce repetition (e.g., 'I've been there once' and 'it was my first time') and correct tense consistency ('whenever I come back' should be 'when I go back'). Provide a short reason why that view stands out and use one linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer views in my own country, especially Boracay. When I visited there for the first time, the sunset over the sea was breathtaking, and I remember the vivid colors and calm atmosphere. Because of that peaceful feeling, I still choose Boracay as my favorite place to photograph.

× I usually capture those moments whenever I'm traveling.

✓ I usually capture those moments whenever I travel.

The verb after 'whenever' should be in the simple present to express habitual actions. Using the -ing form 'traveling' is not incorrect in all contexts, but here simple present 'travel' is more appropriate for repeated or habitual actions.

× I love taking photos of different sceneries because it's somewhat a diary for me to keep all those memories on my phone.

✓ I love taking photos of different scenery because it's something of a diary for me to keep all those memories on my phone.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. 'Somewhat' is an adverb meaning 'to some extent' and doesn't fit well before 'a diary'; 'something of a diary' or 'like a diary' is clearer. Use 'scenery' and 'something of a diary' to make the sentence natural.

× It's going to be those rural areas because I love capturing the mountain sceneries because it is a nature and I feel very calm and free whenever I'm in nature.

✓ It's going to be the rural areas because I love capturing mountain scenery; it is nature, and I feel very calm and free whenever I'm in nature.

'Sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is usually uncountable. 'It is a nature' is wrong because 'nature' is uncountable and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Also streamline repetition and punctuation: use 'mountain scenery' and 'it is nature' or better simply 'because it's nature.'

× If I am to choose which views I prefer, I think it's gonna be the rural.

✓ If I were to choose which views I prefer, I think it would be the rural areas.

In hypothetical conditional 'If I am to choose' is awkward; 'If I were to choose' or 'If I had to choose' is more appropriate. Also 'gonna' is informal; use 'would be'. Add 'areas' after 'rural' to form correct noun phrase 'rural areas.'

× I've been there once and it was my first time visiting that place and the sunset was magnificent.

✓ I went there once; it was my first time visiting that place, and the sunset was magnificent.

Using present perfect 'I've been there once' with 'it was my first time' is not strictly wrong, but 'I went there once' aligns the past-time sequence better with 'it was my first time' and 'the sunset was magnificent.' Using simple past makes the narrative consistent.

× It was breathtaking and I could still remember that feeling whenever I come back to that place.

✓ It was breathtaking, and I can still remember that feeling whenever I go back to that place.

Mixing past 'was' with 'could still remember' and present 'come back' creates tense inconsistency. Use present ability 'can still remember' and present simple 'go back' to indicate that the memory persists whenever you return in the future or habitually.