视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms), and avoid hesitations and unclear words. Use one or two supporting details with appropriate linking words and specific vocabulary (e.g., landscape, scenery, lighting). Keep answers to at most 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I love photographing different views. For example, when I was in my early twenties I often travelled by train and took many landscape photos to capture changing light and colours. I enjoy wide-open scenes because they feel peaceful and remind me of those journeys.

建議: Clarify your choice and fix vocabulary/grammar errors. Begin with a direct topic sentence (I prefer rural views). Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and give two specific reasons with correct words (e.g., open spaces, natural scenery, noisy city). Avoid fragmented sentences and incorrect terms like 'war', 'postal'.

範例: I prefer rural views because I like wide open spaces and natural scenery. For instance, when I feel stressed from work, going to the countryside helps me relax and recharge, since it is quieter and less crowded than the city.

建議: Give a clear, direct answer and avoid confusing phrasing. Start with 'I prefer...' or 'I like both, but...' Then provide a reason and a specific example. Correct grammar (avoid 'I lost my views', 'I'm a really sad') and use linking words (because, however). Keep it concise.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because we have diverse landscapes that are easy to visit. For example, there are mountains, rivers and coastal areas nearby, but I wish there were more convenient train connections so I could explore them more often.

× I love taking picture of different views.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views.

The plural form 'pictures' is required when referring to multiple photos. Use the plural noun with no article: 'taking pictures of different views.' Suggestion: Use plural nouns after verbs that indicate repeated actions (take pictures).

× When I was about 22 or 20 3 and travelling by trains I used to take a lots of photos of the landscape because I enjoyed capturing the changing lights and wide open scanners to remember my.

✓ When I was about 22 or 23 and traveling by train, I used to take lots of photos of the landscape because I enjoyed capturing the changing light and wide-open scenes to remember them.

Multiple errors: incorrect number '20 3' should be '23'; 'travelling by trains' should be 'traveling by train' (use singular for mode of transport and correct spelling variant); 'a lots of photos' should be 'lots of photos' (drop 'a'); 'changing lights' is acceptable but 'changing light' is more natural; 'wide open scanners' is incorrect word choice; use 'wide-open scenes'; sentence-end 'to remember my' should be 'to remember them' using the correct pronoun. Suggestions: keep past habitual tense 'used to' and ensure nouns and pronouns agree and choose correct vocabulary.

× I prefer building rural ria because I enjoy open spaces and address real natural scenery.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I enjoy open spaces and real natural scenery.

Nonsense words 'building rural ria' and 'address real natural scenery' indicate wrong word choices and word order. Correct phrase is 'rural areas'; 'real natural scenery' is better than 'address real natural scenery'. Suggestion: use 'prefer rural areas' and keep adjective before noun.

× When I'm busy with war, visiting the countryside help me relax and return.

✓ When I'm busy with work, visiting the countryside helps me relax and recover.

'War' is likely a mispronunciation of 'work'; 'help' must agree with singular gerund subject 'visiting', so use 'helps'; 'return' is wrong verb for context—use 'recover' or 'recharge.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose verbs that match meaning.

× Give me a break from postal and bustle of city life.

✓ It gives me a break from the noise and bustle of city life.

Original lacks clear subject and uses 'postal' incorrectly; sentence should indicate what 'visiting the countryside' does for the speaker: 'It gives me a break...' Also include definite article 'the' before 'noise and bustle.' Suggestion: use complete clause with subject and correct collocations 'noise and bustle.'

× I lost my views in my country or you know, in my country we have a lot of scenery and landscape.

✓ I love the views in my country; we have a lot of beautiful scenery and landscapes.

'I lost my views' is incorrect—likely intended 'I love the views.' Also 'a lot of scenery and landscape' needs plural 'landscapes' and adjective 'beautiful' can be added. Suggestion: use correct verb 'love' and appropriate noun forms.

× Or I'm a really sad because I don't have don't have train to feel all of them.

✓ Or I'm really sad because I don't have a train to see all of them.

Multiple errors: double 'don't have don't have' should be single 'don't have'; 'a train' requires article; 'to feel all of them' should be 'to see them' for scenery. 'I'm a really sad' is ungrammatical—use 'I'm really sad.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use correct articles and verbs matching the intended meaning.