视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., use "look back" not "took up"; "it blew my mind" not "blown").

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I look back at photos from a mountain trip, I can recall the cool wind and bright sunrise, which always makes me feel relaxed. Photography is a calming hobby that lets me keep those memories.

建議: Clarify your preference with a clear topic sentence and coherent supporting reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "glow" or "glamour" not "girls of city") and linking words ("however", "on the other hand"). Keep sentences short and avoid hesitations.

範例: It depends on my mood. I enjoy urban views for their skyline and neon lights because they feel exciting; however, when I need peace and to think clearly, I prefer rural views with quiet landscapes and open space.

建議: Give a direct answer and support it with a specific, coherent reason and a clear example. Correct word choice (e.g., "view" or "scenery" not "wave"); avoid vague statements and repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. For example, my hometown has a small dam surrounded by trees; every time I visit it I feel calm and connected to my roots.

× I love taking pictures of different views so when I reach home I can took up and have a nostalgic memory of those places.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views so when I reach home I can look them up and have a nostalgic memory of those places.

The verb 'took' is past tense and incorrectly used after 'can' which requires the base form. Also 'took up' is wrong collocation; 'look up' or 'look at' fits the meaning. Use modal + base verb (can + look) and correct verb phrase.

× So I can remember, oh, at this time I was there.

✓ So I can remember, 'Oh, at that time I was there.'

The original is mostly correct tense-wise but missing proper phrasing for the recalled moment; use 'at that time' to refer to a specific past moment. Quotation punctuation shown for clarity; primary correction is word choice not tense.

× I, I was present in that time and that really blown my mind.

✓ I was present at that time and that really blew my mind.

'Was present at that time' uses correct preposition 'at' for moments. 'Blown' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary (has/had) or simple past 'blew' to match 'was' context; use simple past 'blew.'

× And I think photography is literally such a relaxing hobby.

✓ And I think photography is such a relaxing hobby.

The adverb 'literally' is often misused for emphasis; remove it for natural speech. The sentence is grammatically correct but 'literally' is unnecessary and can be misleading.

× It actually depends Sometimes I like the girls of city where the skyline from city line and then, you know, those neon, neon lights.

✓ It actually depends. Sometimes I like the sights of the city, such as the skyline and neon lights.

Original has multiple errors: missing punctuation, incorrect noun 'girls' instead of 'sights,' awkward phrasing 'skyline from city line.' Correct by breaking into two sentences, using 'sights' and clear noun phrases 'skyline and neon lights.'

× Uh, sometimes I love, I really love city, but when I'm, when I have like my mood is up to some more peace and I wanna think clearly that's.

✓ Sometimes I really love the city, but when I want more peace and to think clearly, I prefer the countryside.

This sentence mixes informal fillers and incorrect structure. Use 'the city' with article, replace 'when I have like my mood is up to some more peace' with 'when I want more peace,' and finish the idea clearly. 'Wanna' replaced with 'want to' for correct form.

× Definitely my own country.

✓ Definitely my own country.

Short answer is acceptable; grammatically correct as a fragment in spoken response. No change needed.

× Like it depends.

✓ It depends.

'Like it depends' is colloquial and redundant. Remove 'like' to form a clear statement.

× It doesn't really matter where the wave is from, every nature is same and everything is beautiful.

✓ It doesn't really matter where the view is from; nature is the same and everything is beautiful.

'Wave' is incorrect noun here; likely 'view.' 'Every nature is same' is ungrammatical—use 'nature is the same' or 'every part of nature is beautiful.' Also add punctuation to separate clauses.

× For example in my hometown there is one scenery of there where there's a little dam.

✓ For example, in my hometown there is a scenic spot where there's a little dam.

'Scenery of there' is awkward; use 'a scenic spot' or 'a beautiful view.' Add commas and correct noun phrase for natural English.

× So I really love that place.

✓ So I really love that place.

This sentence is fine as spoken English; no grammatical correction necessary.

× So I think country doesn't depend every nature.

✓ So I think the country doesn't determine the beauty of nature.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'the country doesn't determine the beauty of nature' to express that natural beauty isn't dependent on country. Adjust word order and add article.