视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and redundant phrases, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence with supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about examples. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and correct article/noun agreement (e.g., "a mountain", "street food vendors").

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountain landscapes and colorful scenes of street food vendors, because their vibrant activity and textures make compelling subjects. If a photograph inspires me, I sometimes recreate it later in a painting.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Improve grammar (use singular/plural, articles) and natural phrasing (less pollution, peaceful environment). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas. Because there is less pollution and a more peaceful environment, I find rural scenery more relaxing and attractive than urban views.

建議: Be specific and coherent: give a clear preference, then compare with examples using linking words. Fix grammar (plural/singular, articles, word choice) and avoid hesitations. Provide concrete details about what you like about your country’s views and how other countries differ.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because I am familiar with its diverse landscapes and local culture. However, some other countries have impressive mountain ranges and distinctive climates that create dramatic scenery, which I also admire when I travel.

× Yes, I like to uh, take picture of different views such as a mountains or different aesthetics.

✓ Yes, I like to, uh, take pictures of different views such as mountains or different aesthetics.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker refers to taking multiple photos. Also 'a mountains' is incorrect: 'mountains' (plural) does not take the article 'a'. Use 'mountains' or 'a mountain'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and match articles accordingly.

× Yes, I like to uh, take picture of different views such as a mountains or different aesthetics.

✓ Yes, I like to, uh, take pictures of different views such as mountains or different aesthetics.

The phrase 'take picture of' is missing the preposition/article agreement; the common collocation is 'take pictures of'. Use 'take pictures of' for photographing scenes. Also remove the unnecessary article before 'mountains'.

× Things such as uh, people selling umm on a street food, street food about different food.

✓ For example, people selling street food or different kinds of food on the street.

The original sentence is fragmented and has redundant phrases ('street food, street food about different food'). Reorder words into a clear noun phrase: 'people selling street food' or 'people selling different kinds of food on the street.' Use 'for example' to introduce examples.

× And if the picture is really good, then I like to paint.

✓ And if the picture is really good, then I like to paint it.

The verb 'paint' usually takes an object when referring to painting a picture. Adding 'it' clarifies that the speaker paints the photograph or scene. Without the object the sentence is grammatically acceptable but less precise.

× Because of the less pollutions and peace environment, I would like to live in the rural area in comparison to urban area.

✓ Because of less pollution and a peaceful environment, I would prefer to live in a rural area rather than an urban area.

'Less pollutions' is incorrect: 'pollution' is an uncountable noun, so use 'less pollution.' 'Peace environment' should be 'peaceful environment' (adjective use). Use 'a rural area' and 'an urban area' or 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' for general preference. Use 'prefer ... rather than' for comparisons.

× Because of the less pollutions and peace environment, I would like to live in the rural area in comparison to urban area.

✓ Because of less pollution and a peaceful environment, I would prefer to live in a rural area rather than an urban area.

Use articles correctly: 'a peaceful environment', 'a rural area', and 'an urban area'. Articles are required before singular countable nouns when speaking generally but referring to one example.

× I like the views of my own country.

✓ I like the views of my own country.

This sentence is correct and needs no change. Subject-verb agreement is fine: 'I like' matches the plural noun 'views.'

× In terms of others, umm, there are lots of mountains and covering the regions.

✓ In other countries, there are lots of mountains covering the regions.

'In terms of others' is awkward; 'in other countries' is clearer. The participle 'covering the regions' needs a subject, so attach it to 'mountains': 'mountains covering the regions.' This fixes sentence flow and clarity.

× The climatic conditions is also a wonderful uh, which changes the view.

✓ The climatic conditions are also wonderful and they change the view.

'Climatic conditions' is plural, so use the plural verb 'are.' The phrase 'is also a wonderful' incorrectly treats plural as singular and uses an indefinite article. Use 'wonderful' (no article) and make the clause explicit: 'they change the view.' Alternatively: 'The climate is also wonderful, which changes the view.'