视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., 'the nature' → 'nature', 'scenarios' → 'scenes', 'saw that, see that paper' is unclear). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views. I usually focus on natural scenes such as mountains and lakes because they capture memories of places I’ve enjoyed. For example, when I travel I take many photos to remind me of special moments and places later on.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and two contrasting reasons using linking words (e.g., 'but'/'however'/'on the other hand'). Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'it depends on my mood', 'both views', 'urban', 'rural', 'when I feel like relaxing I prefer rural views'). Avoid long fragments and unclear phrases.

範例: It depends on my mood. When I feel energetic, I prefer urban views because the city’s activity and lights are exciting. However, when I want to relax, I choose rural views because quiet countryside landscapes help me unwind.

建議: Give a clear simple statement followed by specific reasons. Fix grammar and reduce repetition (e.g., 'prefer the views of my own country', 'cheaper and easier to access'). Mention concrete examples or feelings to make the answer more vivid. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they are easier and cheaper to visit. Also, seeing familiar places reminds me of my childhood and brings back happy memories, such as visiting the beach where I used to play as a child.

× Absolutely, I love to take pictures of different views, like mainly I take pictures of the nature and the scenarios.

✓ Absolutely, I love taking pictures of different views; mainly I take pictures of nature and of different scenes.

Use the gerund 'taking' after 'love' for a general habit (Verb in the present participle form). Also 'the nature' and 'the scenarios' are unnatural: drop the article before 'nature' and use 'scenes' instead of 'scenarios' for photographic views. Improve sentence flow with a semicolon or conjunction.

× And whenever I travel I love to take many pictures because in the future whenever I saw that, see that paper, I often remember the things which I have enjoyed.

✓ Whenever I travel I love to take many pictures because in the future when I see those photos I often remember the things I enjoyed.

Incorrect tense use: 'saw' is past while the meaning requires present/future 'see' (Past tense issue). Also 'that paper' is wrong word choice; 'those photos' fits context. Use simple past 'I enjoyed' for completed experiences rather than present perfect here to match 'often remember'.

× Personally I love it depend on my mood.

✓ Personally, it depends on my mood.

Subject-pronoun and verb agreement: 'I love it depend' mixes pronouns and verb forms incorrectly (Incorrect use of pronouns). The correct impersonal expression is 'it depends on my mood.'

× I love the both views.

✓ I love both kinds of views.

'The both' is incorrect English; use 'both' before the noun without 'the' or rephrase as 'both kinds of views' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs).

× Like for example when I whenever I feel energetic and want to enjoy the movement with energy, I love to see the urban views.

✓ For example, when I feel energetic and want to enjoy the city's lively atmosphere, I like to look at urban views.

Redundant words ('like for example', 'when I whenever'), awkward phrase 'enjoy the movement with energy' and inconsistent verbs cause a sentence structure issue. Simplify and choose vocabulary that fits the idea: 'city's lively atmosphere' and 'like to look at urban views.'

× But whenever I see feel to myself I won't comfort a comfort.

✓ But when I feel like being quiet, I prefer rural views.

Original sentence has several pronoun and wording errors making it unintelligible (Incorrect use of pronouns). Rephrase to express the intended contrast: when wanting quiet/comfort, choose rural views.

× I often see ruler views.

✓ I often see rural views.

Typo/confusion: 'ruler' (singular noun) is incorrect; the intended plural adjective 'rural' describes views (Singular and plural issue). Use 'rural' and 'views' plural to match context.

× Mainly I prefer to prefer the videos of my own country, because I think it is easier to access and more cheaply cheap because and I also think that by looking my own country view help me to remember my childhood and I always love to see my own country.

✓ Mainly I prefer views of my own country because they are easier to access and cheaper, and looking at my country's scenery helps me remember my childhood; I always love to see my homeland.

Multiple problems: unnecessary repetition 'prefer to prefer' and wrong 'videos' vs 'views' (Verb in the present participle form and sentence structure errors). 'More cheaply cheap' is incorrect comparative/adverb usage; use 'cheaper'. 'By looking my own country view help me' lacks correct verb agreement; use 'looking at ... helps' (subject-verb agreement). Also choose 'homeland' or 'my country' for natural phrasing.