视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace fillers (“umm”) and use correct verbs and nouns (pictures tell memories → pictures remind me of memories). Also avoid unclear phrases (“remind Mary more time”) and use precise expressions like “remind me of past moments.” Aim for 2–3 short sentences, natural vocabulary, and correct tense.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I’m older I can look at those pictures and recall family trips and the places I visited.

建議: Clarify and be accurate with contrasting details. Use linking words (but, however, while) and avoid mixing up rural/urban characteristics (cities have city lights; rural areas have natural scenery). Provide specific examples to support preference. Keep answers concise and grammatical.

範例: I prefer both, but for different reasons. In urban areas I enjoy photographing city lights and modern architecture, while in rural areas I like capturing natural landscapes like fields and rivers.

建議: Make your opinion clear and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct statement, then give specific reasons using linking words (because, and, also). Correct collocations (explore the culture and heritage; take true pictures → capture authentic scenes). Use concise phrasing and one or two concrete examples.

範例: I like views in both my country and abroad because at home I feel connected to familiar landscapes and traditions, and abroad I can discover different cultures and historic sites. For example, I enjoy photographing local festivals at home and ancient architecture when I travel.

× pictures, umm, tells memories.

✓ pictures, umm, tell memories.

Subject 'pictures' is plural so the verb must be plural 'tell' not 'tells'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number; for clarity say 'Pictures remind me of memories.'

× When I grow grow old, I'm gonna look at picture and remind Mary more time.

✓ When I grow old, I'm going to look at pictures and remember many more times of Mary.

Issues: 'grow grow' is repetition; 'gonna' is informal contraction of 'going to'—use 'am going to' in formal speech; 'picture' should be plural 'pictures'; 'remind Mary more time' is incorrect word choice and structure—use 'remember Mary many more times' or 'be reminded of Mary many times'. Suggestion: say 'When I grow old, I am going to look at pictures and remember Mary many more times.'

× In urban areas I like taking umm, natural scenery there.

✓ In urban areas I like taking photos of natural scenery there.

'taking natural scenery' is incorrect collocation; we 'take photos of' scenery. Also include 'photos' to indicate what is taken. Suggestion: use 'take photos of' + object: 'take photos of natural scenery.'

× In a rural area I like taking city lights picture.

✓ In rural areas I like taking pictures of city lights.

Use plural 'pictures' for general preference; 'a rural area' vs 'rural areas'—use plural to match 'urban areas' earlier or keep singular consistently. Also use 'take pictures of city lights' (preposition 'of'). Suggestion: say 'In rural areas I like taking pictures of city lights.'

× I do prefer both views in my country and other countries because in my own country I love my own country but other country I can explore the culture, their heritage, true picture.

✓ I prefer views in both my country and other countries because in my own country I love the place, but in other countries I can explore different cultures, their heritage, and true images.

Multiple issues: 'I do prefer both views' is awkward—use 'I prefer views in both...'; 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' or use 'another country'; repetition 'my own country I love my own country' is redundant—shorten to 'I love my own country'; 'true picture' is vague—use 'true images' or 'a truer picture' and include articles/prepositions ('in other countries'). Suggestion: simplify and parallel structure: 'I prefer views in both my country and other countries because I love my own country, but in other countries I can explore different cultures and heritage.'