视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và rõ ràng: tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “I I”), hoàn thiện cấu trúc câu và rút gọn để không quá dài. Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về loại ảnh bạn thích và hoàn thành câu cuối để tránh bỏ lửng. Ví dụ: nêu một kỷ niệm cụ thể hoặc cảm xúc khi xem lại ảnh.

範例: Yes, I do. I mainly take photos to preserve memories of places I’ve visited. For instance, I often photograph coastal landscapes at sunset and candid moments of my family so I can relive those feelings when I look back.

建議: Cải thiện sự rõ ràng và liên kết ý: câu trả lời hiện tại lặp ý và có lỗi ngữ pháp/ từ sai (ví dụ: “the strict one”, câu kết bị bỏ dở). Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, so sánh hai loại cảnh bằng các liên từ (e.g., “however”, “while”) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể cho từng loại (ví dụ: skyline at night; rice terraces in countryside).

範例: I actually prefer both. Urban areas are great for dramatic night skylines and interesting architecture, while rural areas offer peaceful green landscapes like rice terraces that highlight natural beauty.

建議: Cải thiện cấu trúc và rõ ràng nội dung: hiện tại câu rời rạc, ngắt quãng, nhiều lỗi từ vựng (e.g., “export”) và thiếu ví dụ mạch lạc. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề thẳng thắn, giải thích lý do cụ thể (gắn kết cảm xúc, kiến thức về văn hóa, dễ đi lại) và kết thúc bằng so sánh ngắn với một vài điểm về nước khác (ví dụ: Nhật Bản, châu Âu).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the places and their histories, and I still have many regions I want to explore. However, I’m also interested in countries like Japan or some European cities for their unique architecture and culture.

× Definitely, mainly because I want to preserve memories of the places that I I went.

✓ Definitely, mainly because I want to preserve memories of the places that I have been to.

The original sentence repeats 'I' and uses simple past 'went' which sounds odd with 'want to preserve' (present desire about past experiences). Use present perfect 'have been to' to connect past visits to present relevance; also remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestions: remove repeated words, use present perfect for life experiences (I have been to several places).

× I usually take pictures of landscapes or pictures of my friends or family to capture the memories and look back whenever I have the time to just.

✓ I usually take pictures of landscapes or of my friends and family to capture memories and look back whenever I have time.

The phrase 'to just' is incomplete and awkward. Also 'pictures of my friends or family' is better as 'friends and family'. Remove unnecessary articles and 'the' before 'memories'. Simplify 'whenever I have the time' to 'whenever I have time'.

× In both areas I think that you can capture very beautiful photos no matter where you are.

✓ In both areas I think you can capture very beautiful photos no matter where you are.

No major grammar error; removed unnecessary 'that' for natural spoken English. Keep structure concise. 'No matter where you are' is correct. Note: this is a stylistic tweak rather than a strict grammatical correction.

× And with urban areas, especially at night time, you can capture very beautiful stunning architectures in places like the strict one.

✓ And in urban areas, especially at night, you can capture stunning architecture in places like the city centre.

'Very beautiful stunning' is redundant; choose one adjective such as 'stunning'. 'Architectures' is uncountable in this sense; use 'architecture'. 'Strict one' is incorrect; likely 'city centre' or 'the city' is intended. Also 'at night time' is more natural as 'at night'.

× But rural areas in green spaces give you more.

✓ But rural areas with green spaces offer more variety and peaceful scenery.

'Give you more' is vague and incomplete. Provide a clearer noun phrase such as 'more variety and peaceful scenery'. 'In green spaces' is awkward; 'with green spaces' or simply 'rural areas' is better.

× I prefer views in my own country because just where I am born and raised and there are very there are a lot of places that I haven't visited or export yet, so I can't.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it is where I was born and raised, and there are many places I haven't visited yet, so I can't say for sure.

Multiple problems: verb tense wrong ('am born and raised' should be passive past 'was born and raised'); stray word 'just' misplaced; 'very there are' is redundant; 'export' is wrong word—likely 'explore'; sentence ends abruptly with 'so I can't'—complete it with 'so I can't say for sure'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for succinctness.

× Accurately, but there are countries that would.

✓ Actually, there are other countries I would like to visit, especially Japan and some European countries.

'Accurately, but there are countries that would.' is fragmented and unclear. 'Accurately' is wrong word; likely 'actually'. Complete the thought: mention wanting to visit other countries and give examples. 'European' should be 'European countries' or list specific countries.