视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “scenic beauties” + “landscapes”) and fix tense/word order errors (e.g., “I have a phone which has a very good camera” or “I usually capture sunsets and landscapes”).

範例: Yes. I enjoy taking photos when I go out, especially at parks and beaches. For example, I often photograph sunsets and coastal landscapes because the light and colours are beautiful, and I later use the pictures as phone wallpapers or to share with friends.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence contrasting the two, then give specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., "I prefer rural areas to urban areas") and avoid vague phrases like “whenever you are watching again and again it comes your mind.” Use one or two concrete benefits (calm, cleaner air, scenery).

範例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they have more greenery and open landscapes. For example, the fresh air and quiet countryside make me feel relaxed, and the natural scenery is memorable when I look at my photos later.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar: say you prefer views in your country and specify the region clearly. Remove filler sounds and repetitions. Provide concrete examples (mountains, plantations, beaches) and explain briefly why they appeal to you (diversity of scenery, accessibility).

範例: I prefer views in my own country, especially in the south of India. For instance, Kerala offers diverse scenery—green mountains, tea plantations and long beaches—which I find beautiful and easy to visit for photography.

× Yes, I like to take pictures whenever I am going outside to especially to the parks or beaches.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures whenever I go outside, especially to parks or beaches.

The original uses the progressive form 'am going' which is not appropriate for habitual actions; use simple present 'go'. Also remove unnecessary 'to' before 'especially' and use plural 'parks' for general meaning. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and avoid extra prepositions.

× I have a phone which is very good camera and I used to capture almost all the scenic beauties and sunset and landscapes.

✓ I have a phone which is a very good camera, and I use it to capture almost all the scenic beauty, sunsets, and landscapes.

Missing indefinite article before 'very good camera' ('a very good camera'). 'Used to' implies a past habit; the student means present habit so use 'use'. 'Scenic beauties' is awkward; use uncountable 'scenic beauty' or 'scenic views'. Make 'sunset' plural 'sunsets' when speaking generally. Also add 'it' as object of 'use'.

× I prefer using a rural areas compared to urban areas have more greenery and landscapes which is more relaxing and refreshing for your mind and whenever you are watching again and again it comes your mind.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have more greenery and landscapes, which are more relaxing and refreshing for the mind; when you look at them again and again they come to mind.

Mix of issues: 'using a rural areas' mixes gerund and article/plural—should be 'prefer rural areas'. 'Compared to urban areas have' is ungrammatical; use 'because they have'. Pronoun agreement: use 'they' to refer to 'rural areas'. 'Which is more' should match plural 'areas/landscapes' so use 'which are'. 'Your mind' is better as 'the mind' in general statements. 'Whenever you are watching again and again it comes your mind' is awkward; use 'when you look at them again and again they come to mind'.

× I prefer the views in my country than my country in southern part of India.

✓ I prefer the views in my country, especially in the southern part of India.

Incorrect comparative structure: use 'prefer X to Y' or rephrase. Original repeats 'my country' and misplaces 'than'. Better: 'prefer the views in my country, especially in the southern part of India.' Use 'in the southern part' as correct preposition phrase.

× Kerala have most uh, most uh, landscaping around with more mountains and Green Mountains, especially with the plantations and uh, uh, and beaches and uh.

✓ Kerala has most of the landscaping, with many mountains and green hills, especially plantations and beaches.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Kerala' (singular) requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Most uh, most uh, landscaping around' is ungrammatical—use 'most of the landscaping' or 'a lot of landscaping'. 'Green Mountains' as a common noun should be 'green hills' or 'green mountains' lowercase. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'has' for singular subjects and clean up redundancies.