视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ดีมากที่แสดงความชอบและให้เหตุผล แต่ควรปรับโครงสร้างให้กระชับและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น แก้คำผิดเล็กน้อย และใช้ linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อ ตอบตรงคำถาม แล้วให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ตัวอย่างเหตุการณ์หรือความรู้สึกที่เจอ ไปพร้อมกับเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อม (because, so, for example) จำกัดคำตอบไม่เกิน 4-5 ประโยค

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they capture both beauty and memories. For example, when I photograph a sunset, I remember the colors and how peaceful I felt. This helps me relive that moment later, so I take pictures whenever I find a scene that moves me.

建議: คำตอบมีแนวคิดดี แต่ประโยคไม่สมบูรณ์และซ้ำซ้อน ควรย่อให้ชัดเจน ใช้โครงสร้างหัวข้อ-เหตุผล-ตัวอย่าง และแก้ไวยากรณ์ เช่น ลบ 'it's' ที่ไม่จำเป็น และใช้ linking words (because, so, for instance) ให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ลักษณะของชนบทที่ชอบ (ทุ่งนา, ภูเขา, ความสงบ)

範例: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and unspoiled. For instance, I like photographing quiet fields and mountains where the scenery isn't designed for tourists, so the photos seem more authentic and peaceful.

建議: ตอบชัดเจนว่าชอบทั้งสองแบบ แต่ประโยคยาวและมีคำซ้ำ/ผิดตำแหน่ง ควรแยกเป็นประโยคสั้น ๆ ใช้ linking words (but, however, because) และให้ตัวอย่างเฉพาะ เช่น ประเภทวิวหรือวัฒนธรรมที่อยากเห็น จัดให้ไม่เกิน 4 ประโยค

範例: I enjoy the views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. However, I would love to see views in other countries because they reveal different cultures and ways of life, for example, local markets or traditional architecture that tell stories about the people.

× I do love taking pictures everywhere I go.

✓ I love taking pictures wherever I go.

Use of pronoun 'everywhere' is acceptable but idiomatic expression is 'wherever I go'. Also omit auxiliary 'do' unless emphasizing; here simple present 'I love' is natural.

× I feel like it's not only the beauty of the picture itself, but it also the memories and the feelings.

✓ I feel like it's not only the beauty of the picture itself, but also the memories and feelings.

Redundant subject 'it' before 'also' creates awkward structure. Remove the extra 'it' and parallelize the two elements: 'the beauty' and 'the memories and feelings'.

× You keep it in that picture while you took it, and I really like that.

✓ You keep it in that picture when you take it, and I really like that.

Mixing present 'keep' with past 'took' is inconsistent. Use present simple 'take' to match 'keep' for general statements. Also use 'when' instead of 'while' for the moment of taking a photo.

× I would prefer the rural areas because the view it's not intentionally made to get your attention so it's more like.

✓ I would prefer rural areas because the view is not intentionally made to get your attention, so it's more natural.

Incorrect contraction 'the view it's' should be 'the view is' or 'it's'; avoid both 'the' with plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally, so 'prefer rural areas'. Sentence ended abruptly; complete idea with 'more natural'.

× A beauty in its own way, not to attract people just like the same.

✓ They have their own beauty and are not meant to attract people in the same way.

Fragment 'A beauty in its own way' lacks a clear subject-verb structure. Recast as a full sentence. 'Just like the same' is ungrammatical—use 'in the same way' or 'the same way'.

× I do enjoy and love my the view in my own country, but I would love to experience to see the views in other countries because it's not just the view but it's the culture, the living, the people that we could see through.

✓ I enjoy and love the views in my own country, but I would love to see the views in other countries because it's not just the scenery but also the culture, the way of life, and the people you can learn about.

Multiple issues: remove redundant 'my the'; use plural 'views' for general statement; 'experience to see' is incorrect—use 'see' or 'experience'. 'Living' is vague—use 'way of life'. Avoid 'we could see through' and use 'you can learn about' or 'you can see'.