视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and plural/possessive errors. For example, say you enjoy photographing different views, explain why in one sentence, and give a brief specific example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. As a photographer, I take many shots of a scene so I can later select the one that best matches the mood; for instance, I might choose a misty, low-light image for a somber mood or a bright, colorful shot for a cheerful feel.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, correct word choices, and reduce repetition. Use a linking word to contrast and provide a specific reason. Replace unclear words (e.g. 'brawlers', 'move') with 'rural areas' and 'occasion'.

範例: I prefer urban views. Although rural areas can be beautiful sometimes, I like cities because they offer diverse architecture and vibrant street scenes, which give me more interesting subjects to photograph.

建議: Provide a complete, grammatical answer: give a direct statement, a clear reason, and a specific example with correct word order. Remove filler words and finish the thought. Mention one concrete memory or detail to support your preference.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to its culture and landscapes. For example, I grew up on the coast of Jeddah, so seaside scenes there remind me of childhood memories and inspire me when I take photographs.

× Yes I do. Uh, as a photographer I always take a lot of pictures of different views because it makes it easy to me later.

✓ Yes, I do. As a photographer, I always take a lot of pictures of different views because it makes it easy for me later.

Incorrect preposition/phrase with 'easy to me'. Use 'easy for me' to indicate something benefits or is convenient for the speaker. Also added commas for natural speech flow. Suggestion: use 'easy for me' after 'makes' when expressing convenience or benefit.

× Just choose their best 1 based on their mood.

✓ I just choose the best one later based on my mood.

Sentence is unclear and has incorrect pronouns and numeral use. 'Their' is ambiguous and '1' should be written as 'one'; also tense and subject didn't match. Recast to 'I just choose the best one later based on my mood' to make subject, verb and object clear. Suggestion: use explicit subject and spell out numbers in speech transcripts.

× Honestly urban areas are my favorite even when I travel I always travel to uh, urban.

✓ Honestly, urban areas are my favorite; even when I travel, I always go to urban areas.

Awkward repetition 'travel to urban' and missing plural noun. Use 'go to urban areas' or 'visit urban areas' to be grammatically correct and natural. Added commas and rephrased for clarity.

× But brawlers sometimes are good.

✓ But rural areas are sometimes good.

'Brawlers' is a mispronunciation or wrong word. The intended word is 'rural' (adjective) and needs the noun 'areas'. Ensure correct vocabulary: 'rural areas'. Suggestion: check pronunciation and choose correct word form.

× So it depends on the move, but if I had to pick one of them I'd go with urban areas.

✓ So it depends on the mood, but if I had to pick one, I'd go with urban areas.

'Move' is likely a mispronunciation of 'mood'. Also 'one of them' is redundant; 'one' suffices. Adjusted to 'mood' and simplified phrasing. Suggestion: use 'mood' when referring to personal preference and avoid unnecessary phrases.

× I always prefer, uh, using my own country.

✓ I always prefer my own country.

'Prefer using my own country' is unidiomatic; use 'prefer my own country' or 'prefer staying in my own country'. The verb 'using' is incorrect with 'country'. Suggestion: pair 'prefer' directly with the noun or with 'to' + verb (e.g., 'prefer to stay in my own country').

× I, I feel more connected to the culture.

✓ I feel more connected to the culture.

Repeated 'I' is a speech disfluency; remove the duplicate for written form. Suggestion: in transcripts, omit filler repetitions unless necessary.

× For example, uh, the coastal in Jeddah, uh, my all childhood, uh, was there a grown up And so I always.

✓ For example, the coast in Jeddah is where I grew up and spent my entire childhood, so I always prefer it.

Many problems: 'the coastal' is incorrect — use 'the coast' or 'the coastal area'; 'my all childhood' should be 'my entire childhood'; 'was there a grown up' incorrect tense and structure — use 'I grew up there'; sentence fragmented and missing verb. Rewritten to a complete, grammatically correct sentence. Suggestion: use 'grow up' in past simple for upbringing and 'entire' or 'all my' for childhood duration, and ensure complete clause with subject and verb.