视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words (uh), correct grammar and finish the thought. Add one specific supporting detail and link it logically. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my hobby and helps me preserve memories. For example, when I travel I take photos of landscapes so I can remember how a place looked later. These photos also make it easy to share experiences with friends.

建議: Clarify your preference and avoid mixed messages. Decide whether you prefer rural or urban views, correct contradictions, remove unfinished words, and give one specific reason with a linking word. Keep it natural and grammatically correct.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy city lights at night and the skyline from tall buildings. For instance, seeing the illuminated skyscrapers gives me a sense of excitement and makes the city feel lively.

建議: Be specific about what makes foreign views appealing and correct grammar. Use linking words to give clear examples and avoid repetition. Mention one or two distinct features with brief explanation.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes we don’t have at home. For example, I love deserts and the Alpine scenery in Switzerland, since those environments provide unique colours and textures that are rare in my country.

× Yes, I like taking a pictures of different views because it's my hobby and it's uh, memories for me, especially if I I am not in that place I still.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it's my hobby and it preserves memories for me; especially if I am not in that place, I still have the photos.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the article 'a' before the plural noun 'pictures' (Article errors, ID 22). Remove 'a' to match the plural noun. Also improve clarity and grammar by replacing 'it's uh, memories for me' with 'it preserves memories for me' and completing the second clause 'I still have the photos.' Suggestions: remove unnecessary filler words, match articles to noun number, and complete trailing clauses.

× I prefer in rural areas because I like the views, the city lights, especially in the nights.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like the views and the city lights, especially at night.

The phrase 'prefer in rural areas' incorrectly uses the preposition 'in' (Incorrect prepositions, ID 11). Use 'prefer rural areas' or 'prefer being in rural areas.' 'In the nights' is also incorrect; the correct preposition and idiom is 'at night.' Suggestions: drop the unnecessary preposition after 'prefer' and use standard time expression 'at night.'

× I want to see the many lights in the higher buildings and it feels like a rela.

✓ I want to see the many lights in the taller buildings, and it feels relaxing.

'Higher buildings' is awkward; use 'taller buildings' (word choice but tied to article/adj order). The fragment 'it feels like a rela' is incomplete; likely intended 'relaxing.' Also 'the many lights' is acceptable but 'many lights in taller buildings' reads better. Suggestions: use complete words, correct adjective order and choose standard collocations ('taller buildings', 'feels relaxing').

× I prefer in other countries because it is a place where it is unique and we don't have that here, especially the desert, the beautiful Switzerland place we don't have.

✓ I prefer other countries because they have unique places that we don't have here, especially deserts and beautiful places like Switzerland.

'Prefer in other countries' incorrectly uses 'in' after 'prefer' (Incorrect prepositions, ID 11). Also 'it is a place where it is unique' is ungrammatical and vague; use 'they have unique places.' 'The desert, the beautiful Switzerland place' is awkward and incorrect; use plural 'deserts' or 'a desert' and 'places like Switzerland.' Suggestions: remove 'in' after 'prefer,' match subjects and pronouns ('other countries' -> 'they'), and use natural noun phrases for places.