视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "photos taken by mine" and "good light or conversation"). Also keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often take photos when I go for a walk because I like capturing sunrise light and quiet streets. However, I’m still learning about lighting and composition, so I focus on simple scenes that look good in natural light.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons with linking words. Correct repetition and small grammar issues ("prefer using rural areas" → "prefer rural areas"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include concrete examples to make the answer vivid.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they usually have fresh air, peaceful surroundings, and beautiful natural scenery. For example, I enjoy walking along country paths and photographing rivers and rolling hills, which feel much calmer than busy city streets.

建議: Provide a concise main idea and a clear reason, avoid awkward phrasing and repetition. Use linking words like "because" and give one specific example of a destination and what you want to see there. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct small grammatical errors (e.g. "the see" → "see the").

範例: I prefer seeing views in other countries because I’ve already visited most places in my own country. For example, I’d like to go to Malaysia to photograph its lush landscapes and coastal scenery, especially the tropical forests and beaches.

× the photos taken by mine are not having a good light or conversation.

✓ the photos I take do not have good lighting or composition.

The phrase 'taken by mine' is incorrect; use 'I take' or 'taken by me'. 'Are not having' is a wrong progressive form for a state; use simple present 'do not have'. 'Good light' should be 'good lighting' and 'conversation' is the wrong noun here; 'composition' matches photography context. Suggestion: replace informal/incorrect phrases with 'the photos I take do not have good lighting or composition.'

× So I'd like to take photos when I just go for a walk or when I travel.

✓ So I like to take photos when I go for a walk or when I travel.

Using 'I'd like' (I would like) here slightly conflicts with the habitual meaning intended; simple present 'I like' or 'I usually take' better fits. 'Just' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'I like to take photos when I go for a walk or when I travel' for clear habitual action.

× I prefer using rural areas because in the countryside they mostly have the fresh air, the peacefulness and the natural scenery.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the countryside mostly has fresh air, peacefulness, and natural scenery.

'Prefer using rural areas' is odd; prefer + noun is better. 'They mostly have the fresh air' misuses pronoun 'they' for 'the countryside' (singular) and includes unnecessary definite article 'the' before uncountable nouns. Change to 'the countryside mostly has fresh air, peacefulness, and natural scenery.' Suggestion: use correct subject agreement and drop unnecessary articles.

× So I like to I would like to go there and see the views over there.

✓ So I would like to go there and see the views.

The sentence repeats 'I like to' and 'I would like to' which is redundant. Also 'over there' is repetitive with 'there'. Suggestion: keep one polite expression 'I would like to go there and see the views.'

× I would like to visit other countries and the see the views because in my country I have mostly traveled to all the places so I want to, for example I want to go to Malaysia and say the landscapes and the good scenery over there.

✓ I would like to visit other countries and see the views because I have already traveled to most places in my country. For example, I want to go to Malaysia to see the landscapes and the scenery there.

Multiple tense and word-choice problems: 'the see the views' has an extra article and wrong infinitive form; 'I have mostly traveled to all the places' is awkward—use 'I have already traveled to most places'. 'Say the landscapes' is incorrect; use 'see the landscapes'. 'The good scenery over there' is wordy; 'the scenery there' is natural. Suggestion: simplify and correct tense usage: 'I would like to visit other countries and see the views because I have already traveled to most places in my country. For example, I want to go to Malaysia to see the landscapes and the scenery there.'