视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., a memorable scene or why you enjoy it). Use linking words if you add details.

範例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, on a recent trip to Nepal I filled half my phone with mountain and village scenes because I enjoy capturing dramatic landscapes and local life.

建議: Give a direct preference first and then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and informal expressions like "top top". Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural views overall because the landscapes and greenery are more relaxing. However, I also enjoy urban nights for their lights and skyline, so it depends on my mood.

建議: Answer directly and confidently; remove hesitations (uh). Give one clear reason for your preference and a contrasting point using a linking word. Be specific about what makes home views comfortable and what is attractive about foreign views.

範例: I usually prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and comforting, especially landscapes I grew up with. However, I also enjoy views abroad when I'm on holiday because they offer new scenes and cultural variety.

× Yes, I love photography and recently I have been to Nepal trip where half of my phone's storage is full of different views, pictures of different views and everything.

✓ Yes, I love photography and recently I went on a trip to Nepal where half of my phone's storage is full of pictures of different views and everything.

The phrase 'have been to Nepal trip' is incorrect. Use simple past 'went' for a completed recent trip and the correct collocation is 'went on a trip to Nepal'. Also remove redundant phrase 'different views' repetition and place 'pictures' after 'full of'. Suggestion: Use 'went on a trip to Nepal' for clear past action and avoid repetition.

× Well I sit on a fence when coming to this topic because in urban areas I find nights very beautiful and in rural areas there are very good landscapes and the nature, the greenery is like top top.

✓ Well, I sit on the fence about this topic because in urban areas I find the nights very beautiful, and in rural areas there are great landscapes and lush greenery.

'Sit on a fence' should be 'sit on the fence' and 'when coming to this topic' is awkward; 'about this topic' is correct. 'The nature, the greenery is like top top' is ungrammatical and informal; use 'great landscapes and lush greenery'. Also add commas and articles for clarity. Suggestion: Use set phrases ('sit on the fence') and choose concise adjectives like 'great' or 'lush' instead of informal repetition.

× Uh, I usually, I usually prefer views in my own country because I'm habituated to these views and I feel like home when I see the views, But uh, visiting the other countries, I feel like it's a vacation and it does not give you comfort the place that I have.

✓ Uh, I usually prefer views in my own country because I'm accustomed to them and they make me feel at home. But when I visit other countries, it feels like a vacation and they do not give me the same comfort as my home place.

Repetition 'I usually, I usually' should be reduced. 'I'm habituated to these views' is unnatural; use 'accustomed to them'. 'I feel like home' should be 'they make me feel at home'. 'Visiting the other countries' needs 'when I visit other countries' and pronoun/reference and word order errors in 'it does not give you comfort the place that I have' corrected to 'they do not give me the same comfort as my home place'. Suggestion: Use natural phrases ('accustomed to', 'feel at home') and ensure subject-pronoun agreement and clear word order.