视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct grammar and plural/singular errors, and add one specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because I love capturing natural and interesting scenes. For example, I recently photographed a sunrise over a river, which showed beautiful colours and reflections, so I had a memorable picture.

建議: Clarify preference with correct vocabulary and logic, remove repetition and hesitations, and give specific reasons using linking words. Check word choice (e.g. 'pedian common' unclear) and contrast urban vs rural correctly.

範例: I prefer urban areas because they offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, city streets have interesting buildings and colorful markets, while rural areas can be quiet and lack variety, so urban views are more inspiring to photograph.

建議: Start with a clear statement, avoid grammar mistakes and redundant phrases, list specific places more clearly and link ideas with 'for example' or 'such as'. Mention why these places matter to you to add depth.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. For example, we have beautiful beaches, hills and the Mangrove forests near Khulna, and photographing these places reminds me of home and local culture.

× Obviously I like taking pictures of different views because I like natural, I like interesting, uh, pictures.

✓ Obviously I like taking pictures of different views because I like natural and interesting pictures.

The original repeats 'I like' and uses commas awkwardly. Joining adjectives with 'and' is correct when describing a noun. Remove the extra phrase to make the sentence concise and fluent. Suggestion: use coordinated adjectives 'natural and interesting pictures'.

× So I want to capture in my camera.

✓ So I want to capture them with my camera.

The verb 'capture' needs a direct object (what to capture) and the preposition for the instrument should be 'with'. 'In my camera' is incorrect. Use 'capture them with my camera' or 'take them with my camera'.

× So, uh, I like taking a picture of different place and views.

✓ So, uh, I like taking pictures of different places and views.

'A picture' (singular) conflicts with 'different'; 'place' should be plural when modified by 'different'. Use plural 'pictures' and 'places' to match plurality.

× Actually, I prefer, umm, prefer urban areas, uh, because there are a pedian common, so it's natural view so beautiful.

✓ Actually, I prefer urban areas because the pedestrian areas are common, so the natural views are very beautiful.

The original has unclear noun phrases and pronoun use. 'There are a pedian common' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'pedestrian areas are common'. Use 'the natural views are very beautiful' to refer back with correct definite article and plural agreement.

× So I think, uh, rural areas so rush many people, a lot of people coming here, so very noisy there, I think, uh, urban areas, I think.

✓ I think rural areas are crowded with people and can be very noisy, so I prefer urban areas.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical ('so rush many people'). Use 'are crowded with people' to express crowding and combine ideas into a clear cause-and-effect statement.

× Actually I prefer viewing my own country because I love my country.

✓ Actually I prefer viewing sights in my own country because I love it.

Repeating 'my country' is redundant. Use 'sights in my own country' or 'viewing sights' and replace second 'my country' with pronoun 'it' for concision.

× There are a lot of places beautiful place.

✓ There are a lot of beautiful places.

Word order and article usage are incorrect. Place adjective before noun: 'beautiful places'. Remove redundant 'place'.

× I have a Bundaberg lake, Oxus bazaar, sea beach, hills and natural main group forest in Khulna.

✓ I have Bundaberg Lake, Oxus Bazaar, sea beaches, hills, and a large natural forest area in Khulna.

Use proper nouns capitalized and pluralize 'sea beach' to 'sea beaches' if multiple, and use 'a' with 'large natural forest area' for correctness. 'Main group' is unclear; 'large' or 'main' should be chosen—'large' clarifies size.

× So I like in my own countries and also ka another countries like.

✓ So I like it in my own country and also in other countries.

Use singular 'country' when referring to own country, and 'other countries' for plural. Add preposition 'in' before locations. Remove extraneous words like 'ka' and 'like'.