视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변은 기본적으로 의도가 분명하지만 비문법적 표현과 불필요한 중복, 채우기 말(uh, umm)이 많이 있습니다. 먼저 주제문을 명확하게 하고 그 다음 관련 이유나 구체적인 예를 1~2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 채우는 말은 줄여 유창성을 높이세요. 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하고 어휘는 'landscape, composition, features' 같은 구체적 어휘를 사용해 보세요.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because each landscape has unique features and moods. For example, coastal scenes often have dramatic skies and reflective water, while cityscapes highlight architectural details. I find it interesting to capture those differences through framing and composition.

建議: 답변이 혼란스럽고 문장 구조와 논리적 연결이 불명확합니다('I like rural areas, modern urban areas'처럼 상반된 표현). 주제문에서 선호를 분명히 밝히고 이유를 1~2문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 반복되는 단어(예: relaxed, relaxed)는 피하고 대신 다양한 형용사(relaxed, peaceful, refreshing)를 사용하세요. 또한 간단한 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 사용해 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside makes me feel more relaxed and peaceful. For instance, walking among fields and trees reduces stress and allows me to focus on natural details, unlike busy city streets. Therefore, I usually choose rural locations when I take photos.

建議: 의도는 명확하지만 문법 오류와 어색한 표현(‘I. I live in our country’, ‘other various views and are interested’)이 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문을 말하고 이유를 1~2문장으로 구체화하세요. 이유 제시에 구체적 예시(landmarks, landscapes, cultural differences)를 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다. 문장 연결에 'because, for example, so' 같은 연결어를 사용하고 주어-동사 일치를 확인하세요.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural scenes that I can't see at home. For example, I would love to photograph traditional markets in Asia or dramatic fjords in Scandinavia, which provide unique colors and compositions. Exploring foreign views also broadens my perspective and inspires new ideas for photography.

× Yes, I like that, uh, different view helps, umm, various features. So that's is interesting to me. So I love them.

✓ Yes, I like that. Different views show various features, so they are interesting to me and I love them.

The original contains sentence fragments and redundant words ('that's is'), and mismatch between singular 'view' and plural 'them'. Combine ideas into clear sentences, use plural 'views' to match 'them', and replace informal fillers. Suggestion: remove fillers, ensure subject-verb agreement, and combine clauses for clarity.

× I like rural areas, modern urban areas because I live in Auburn so rural areas makes me feel relaxed, relaxed and comfortable. So I love rural areas.

✓ I like rural areas more than modern urban areas because I live in Auburn, so rural areas make me feel relaxed and comfortable. I love rural areas.

The verb 'makes' does not agree with the plural subject 'rural areas'; use 'make'. Also the sentence structure is awkward and repetitive. Suggestion: compare with 'more than' for preference, use plural verb forms, remove repeated words, and use commas to separate clauses.

× I prefer views in other countries because I. I live in our country so I want to see more other various views and are interested in other countries.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I live in my country, so I want to see more varied views and I am interested in other countries.

The original has fragmented sentence ('because I. I live'), incorrect pronoun 'our country' (should match speaker's perspective), awkward word order 'more other various views', and missing subject for 'are interested'. Combine fragments, use 'my country' or 'my own country', use 'varied views' for clarity, and include the subject 'I' with 'am interested'.