视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., ‘scenery’, ‘capture’, ‘share online’) and limit to 3–4 sentences to sound more natural.

範例: Yes — I love photography and often capture scenery when I travel. For example, I photograph landscapes and cityscapes to remember trips, and then I share my best shots on Instagram. It’s a relaxing hobby that helps me notice small details in a place.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons without repeating phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, additionally) and correct grammar (singular/plural, adjectives). Replace repetitive words ('very very very') with stronger vocabulary.

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer natural scenery like mountains and rivers. For example, the greenery and fresh air make outdoor walks more peaceful, and the quiet environment helps me relax after a busy week.

建議: Begin with a direct statement, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, countable nouns), and avoid fillers. Provide one or two specific reasons or an example to support your preference. Use cohesive devices like 'however' or 'because' to link ideas.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because there is still so much I haven’t explored. For instance, watching travel reels inspires me to visit nearby regions with unique landscapes and cultural sites, so I focus on discovering those places first.

× I actually love photography so much and whenever I travel, I used to take snaps, click pictures of different views, landscape, uh, everything and I will post them on Instagram and share with my friends.

✓ I actually love photography so much, and whenever I travel, I take snaps and click pictures of different views, landscapes, everything, and I post them on Instagram and share them with my friends.

Mixed tense and verb form errors: 'used to take' suggests a past habit but the context is a general present habit, so use simple present 'take'. 'Will post' is future but here simple present 'post' is appropriate for habitual action. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match the plural 'different views'. Also add 'them' after 'share' to clarify the object. Suggestion: use consistent simple present for habitual actions and match singular/plural nouns to meaning.

× It's like nice hobby actually.

✓ It's a nice hobby, actually.

Article and singular noun: English requires an article before a singular countable noun. 'Nice hobby' needs 'a nice hobby'. Also add a comma before 'actually' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'a' with singular countable nouns and place adverbs like 'actually' after a comma for clarity.

× I love views more of rural areas than urban areas because there are mountains, there is rivers, landscape was so greenery compared to urban areas and the air is refreshing.

✓ I prefer rural views to urban ones because there are mountains and rivers, the landscape is very green compared to urban areas, and the air is refreshing.

Preposition and phrasing issues: 'love views more of rural areas' is awkward; use 'prefer rural views to urban ones'. Subject-verb agreement 'there is rivers' should be 'there are rivers'. 'Landscape was so greenery' is incorrect: use present tense 'the landscape is very green' and 'green' (adjective) not 'greenery' (noun). Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y', correct subject-verb agreement, and use adjective 'green' with 'very' for degree.

× I love the views of rural area more because it is very very very healing.

✓ I love the views of rural areas more because they are very, very, very healing.

Number agreement: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match 'views' and 'they' refers to 'views' (plural), so use 'they are' not 'it is'. Also commas improve readability around repeated 'very'. Suggestion: ensure noun and pronoun numbers agree and match plural/singular appropriately.

× Uh, actually each country have their own beauty.

✓ Uh, actually each country has its own beauty.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun agreement: 'each country' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. Use singular possessive pronoun 'its' rather than plural 'their' to agree with 'each country'. Suggestion: with 'each' use singular verb and singular pronoun.

× So I will not say that my country is more beautiful than any other country, but I'll prefer my country more because there is lot to explore in my country.

✓ So I will not say that my country is more beautiful than any other country, but I prefer it because there is a lot to explore in my country.

Tense and verb form: 'I'll prefer my country more' is awkward; use 'I prefer it' for a general preference. Article error: 'there is lot' needs 'a lot'. Also pronoun 'it' refers back to 'my country' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use simple present for general preferences, include 'a' before 'lot', and use pronouns to avoid repeating nouns.

× I know when I see some, uh, Instagram reels, uh, everything I see that there is many beautiful parts in my country that I need to explore.

✓ I know that when I see Instagram reels, I see that there are many beautiful places in my country that I need to explore.

Preposition and number agreement: 'see some, uh, Instagram reels, uh, everything I see' is redundant and ungrammatical; streamline to 'when I see Instagram reels, I see that...'. 'There is many beautiful parts' should be 'there are many beautiful places' — use 'are' for plural and 'places' is a more natural word than 'parts'. Also include 'that' after 'I know' for clarity. Suggestion: remove filler words, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose natural collocations like 'beautiful places'.