视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "reflects" used twice) and correct verb agreement and article use.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I am with my husband. For example, we often photograph beaches and mountains and compile the best shots into a photo book, which helps us remember our happiest moments.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence and combine short fragments into complete sentences. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and correct articles/plurals. Provide a specific example of a rural view to support your preference.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel calmer and more relaxing than cities. For instance, my husband and I enjoy watching sunrise over rice fields, which gives us a peaceful break from our busy life.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons with accurate grammar and varied vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like "patriotic voice"—explain what you mean. Keep it concise and use linking words like "because" or "also".

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they make me feel proud and familiar. For example, the beaches and mountain landscapes in the Philippines are stunning and help me relax, so I often choose local destinations for vacations.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of the different views, especially if I am with my husband, because those pictures reflects our memories, it reflects our happy moments during that time and I like to see those things in a book where we compile it.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I am with my husband, because those pictures reflect our memories; they reflect our happy moments from that time, and I like to see them in a book where we compile them.

The verb 'reflects' does not agree with the plural subject 'pictures' (subject-verb agreement error). Also 'it reflects' incorrectly uses singular pronoun for plural 'pictures' (pronoun agreement). 'Of the different views' is wordy; 'different views' is more natural. Use 'when' instead of 'if' to indicate habitual/typical situation. Use 'they' and 'them' to refer to plural 'pictures'. Use a semicolon or commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects (use 'reflect'), match pronouns to noun number (use 'they/them'), and prefer 'when' for habitual contexts.

× I prefer views in rural areas because it reflects calmness. And relaxation, especially in this busy days with my husband, we want a very scenic view that.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they reflect calmness and relaxation. Especially during these busy days, my husband and I want very scenic views.

The sentence has multiple problems: 'it reflects' uses singular 'it' for plural 'views' (subject-pronoun agreement, which falls under subject-verb agreement category but the main issue here is pronoun and sentence flow). 'And relaxation' is a sentence fragment; it should be connected to the previous clause. 'This busy days' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun and wrong article; use 'these busy days'. Word order 'with my husband, we want a very scenic view that' is awkward and ungrammatical (sentence structure). Suggested fixes: match pronouns to plural noun ('they'), combine related ideas into one sentence, use 'these' with plural 'days', place 'my husband and I' as the subject, and use plural 'views' or 'a very scenic view' consistently.

× I prefer views in my own country because it give us a patriotic voice and in the Philippines there are many scenic views that are really beautiful and very magnificent that really gives us calmness and relaxation.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they give us a sense of patriotism, and in the Philippines there are many scenic places that are truly beautiful and magnificent and that give us calmness and relaxation.

The original uses 'it give' where 'it' wrongly refers to plural 'views' and the verb 'give' is not correctly inflected for singular subject (subject-pronoun and verb agreement). This combines subject-verb agreement and incorrect pronoun reference. Also 'patriotic voice' is unnatural; 'a sense of patriotism' is clearer. Repetition of 'really' is redundant; use 'truly' or remove. Ensure pronouns match their antecedents (use 'they' for 'views') and verbs agree with subjects ('give' for plural 'views'). Improve word choice for natural expression.