视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "how good a thing can be" and repetition (e.g., "that can be looked afterwards"). Work on sentence fluency and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "capture happy moments," "preserve memories").

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photography helps me preserve happy moments. For example, when I visit a park I often photograph the light on the trees to remember the peaceful atmosphere.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer first (e.g., "It depends") then give structured supporting details using linking words like "on the one hand" and "on the other hand." Reduce filler words and correct basic grammar ("when I am in a rural area," "standing"). Include one specific example to strengthen the response.

範例: It depends. On the one hand, I love rural views — for example, standing on a mountain I enjoy the wide-open landscapes and fresh air. On the other hand, urban sunsets over tall buildings can be striking, especially when the sky turns orange behind the skyline.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, then give concise reasons. Fix repetition and grammar (avoid repeating "I haven't"); use precise adjectives and one illustrative detail. Mention future possibility if relevant (e.g., would like to see foreign scenery).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad yet and I appreciate the wide open spaces here. For instance, the countryside near my town has rolling hills and clear skies that feel very peaceful, though I would like to see coastal views in other countries in the future.

× I love taking pictures of different views as I'm fascinated about how good a thing can be and I just like to capture the moment of the happiness and that can be looked afterwards as well.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because I'm fascinated by how beautiful something can be, and I just like to capture a happy moment so it can be looked at afterwards as well.

Errors: incorrect use of prepositions 'fascinated about' (should be 'fascinated by') and 'looked afterwards' (should be 'looked at afterwards'). Also 'how good a thing can be' is awkward; 'how beautiful something can be' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'fascinated by' with the subject that causes fascination and 'looked at' for viewing something later. Use 'because' to link reason clauses.

× Well, it to be honest, it depends where I am stood right now, because when I am in rural area and I'm on a mountain, it's a beautiful, amazing view from up there.

✓ Well, to be honest, it depends where I am standing right now, because when I am in a rural area and I'm on a mountain, the view from up there is beautiful and amazing.

Errors: 'it to be honest' has wrong word order; correct is 'to be honest'. 'where I am stood' uses wrong verb form and passive; use 'where I am standing'. Missing article before 'rural area' -> 'a rural area'. Word order and adjective placement improved: 'the view from up there is beautiful and amazing.' Suggestion: use active present progressive 'standing' and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× But when I am in an urban area and I see a lot of buildings around and just the sunset around the buildings is perfect.

✓ But when I am in an urban area and I see many buildings, the sunset around the buildings is perfect.

Errors: repetition of 'around' is awkward; 'a lot of buildings around' is informal and redundant. Use 'many buildings' or 'a lot of buildings' without 'around'. Keep sentence concise: 'the sunset around the buildings is perfect.' Suggestion: avoid redundant prepositions and choose concise phrasing.

× So it depends really.

✓ So it really depends.

Error: adverb placement is awkward; 'really' should come before the main verb in this short clause. Suggestion: place adverbs in natural positions: 'really depends.'

× Well I haven't, I haven't traveled out of my country yet.

✓ Well, I haven't traveled outside my country yet.

Errors: repeated phrase 'I haven't, I haven't' is redundant. Use 'traveled outside my country' rather than 'traveled out of my country'. Suggestion: use present perfect to describe life experience and 'outside' is more natural than 'out of' here.

× Well so I would choose scenery in my country as it is more beautiful and have a lot of open area and scenery around it so I can really see what the world looks around.

✓ So I would choose the scenery in my country because it is more beautiful and has a lot of open areas and natural landscapes, so I can really see what the world looks like.

Errors: missing article 'the scenery'; verb agreement 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'scenery' (or change subject to plural 'areas'). 'Open area' should be plural 'open areas'. 'Scenery around it' is repetitive; 'natural landscapes' improves clarity. 'What the world looks around' is ungrammatical; use 'what the world looks like.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use 'look like' for appearance; include articles where needed.