视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific reason or brief example using a linking word. Also correct minor grammatical issues (e.g., “watch them” → “look at them”).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different places because they help me preserve memories. For example, I photograph city streets and parks so I can look back at how they changed over time.

建議: Provide a smoother cohesive response: open with a clear preference, give two specific supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid sentence fragments like “For example.”

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy photographing nature. For example, I often shoot flowers and the sky, since the light and cloud formations change every minute and make each photo unique.

建議: Be more precise and natural in phrasing. Start with a direct statement, give a clear reason and one specific example, and avoid vague words like “they.” Use linking words such as “because” or “so.”

範例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because new landscapes and cultures inspire me. For instance, I took photos of coastal villages abroad that are visually different from my hometown, and reviewing them helps me relax.

× Yes, I really love taking pictures of many places because I want to preserve the memories and I want to.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures of many places because I want to preserve memories and look at them later.

The original has an incomplete clause 'and I want to.' which is sentence structure error (ID 26). Also 'preserve the memories' is acceptable but 'preserve memories' is more natural. Combine ideas into one coherent clause and replace the dangling 'I want to' with 'look at them later' to clearly express intention.

× I want to watch them in the future.

✓ I want to look at them in the future.

'Watch' is not the best verb for viewing photos; 'look at' or 'view' is correct. This is a word choice within present tense (ID 6). Use 'look at' to collocate with 'photos' and convey the intended meaning.

× I prefer the views of rural areas because I really like to photograph the views of nature, such as flowers and skies.

✓ I prefer views of rural areas because I really like photographing nature, such as flowers and the sky.

Redundant phrase 'the views of' and awkward repetition 'photograph the views of nature' create a sentence structure problem (ID 26). Use the gerund 'photographing' and simpler phrasing 'photographing nature' and 'the sky' (singular) for natural collocation.

× For example. I usually take photos of the sky because it changes every minute.

✓ For example, I usually take photos of the sky because it changes every minute.

Separating 'For example.' as a sentence fragment is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine into one sentence with a comma after 'For example' to correct the fragment.

× I prefer to take pictures of other countries because it is more interesting for me to look back on other countries view.

✓ I prefer to take pictures in other countries because it is more interesting for me to look back on the views of other countries.

Problems: 'take pictures of other countries' is better as 'take pictures in other countries' (preposition use, ID 11). Also 'other countries view' is missing possessive form and plural 'views' so change to 'the views of other countries'. Adjust prepositions and noun phrases for correctness.

× They are so beautiful and it helps me relax.

✓ They are so beautiful, and they help me relax.

Pronoun reference/number agreement and sentence structure: 'They' refers to 'views' so follow with plural verb 'help' rather than singular 'helps' (subject-verb agreement problem classified here as sentence structure error ID 26). Use 'they help' and add a comma before 'and' to join clauses properly.