视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변은 전반적으로 이해할 수 있지만 문장이 길고 반복이 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제문으로 직접 답한 뒤, 한두 문장으로 구체적인 이유와 예를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 중복(예: "see the pictures later"와 "remember the memory")을 줄이고 시제·관사 사용을 정확히 하세요. 또한 연결어(for example, because, which)로 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I take photos while traveling, I can later look back and recall the places I visited and the people I met.

建議: 문법 오류와 어휘 선택 실수가 여러 번 보입니다("abuse" 오류, 반복된 단어, 복수형·관사 문제). 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 선호를 말한 뒤, 구체적 이유(동물·식물, 평온함 등)를 하나 또는 두 개로 제한해 설명하세요. 또한 비교를 할 때는 'than in the city' 같은 정확한 표현을 사용하세요.

範例: I usually prefer views in rural areas because I can see more wildlife and diverse plants. Compared with the city, the countryside feels much calmer and offers natural scenery that is hard to find in urban areas.

建議: 좋은 답변 구조지만 문법(주어-동사 일치)과 표현을 조금 다듬으면 더 자연스럽습니다. 먼저 간단히 선호를 밝히고, 구체적 이유(예: 산, 해변, 전통적인 장소, 도시의 독특함)를 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 또한 'has' 대신 'have' 등 복수형 일치에 유의하세요.

範例: I prefer views in my own country. I live in South Korea, which has a wide variety of scenery, from beautiful mountains and beaches to unique urban neighborhoods, so I can enjoy many different types of views without traveling abroad.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views because I can see the pictures later and I could remember the memory that I went to such a place or met a person and that would be nice.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I can look at them later and remember visiting a place or meeting someone, which is nice.

The phrase 'like to take' is acceptable but 'like taking' is more natural when describing a hobby; use consistent verb forms. 'See the pictures later' is better as 'look at them later'. 'Could remember the memory that I went to such a place' is wordy and contains tense/modal mismatch; replace with 'remember visiting a place'. Use 'which is nice' to connect the idea naturally. Suggestion: use simple, concise expressions and consistent verb forms (gerund for hobbies) and avoid redundant nouns like 'memory'.

× I usually prefer abuse in rural rural areas because I can see a lot of animal and plants like nature and I can enjoy the view that is not available in city.

✓ I usually prefer rural areas because I can see many animals and plants and enjoy natural scenery that is not available in the city.

The word 'abuse' seems to be a mistake and was removed. 'Rural rural' is a duplication error. Use 'many animals and plants' for countable plural nouns; 'a lot of' is informal but acceptable. 'Like nature' is unclear; use 'natural scenery'. 'The city' needs the definite article. Suggestion: avoid repetition, choose correct vocabulary, use plural forms for countable nouns, and include articles where needed.

× I prefer views in my country. I live in South Korea and in my opinion, South Korea has various places that has beautiful nature and unique city places.

✓ I prefer views in my country. I live in South Korea and, in my opinion, South Korea has various places that have beautiful natural scenery and unique urban areas.

'Places that has' is incorrect because 'places' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have' (subject-verb agreement). 'Beautiful nature' is awkward; 'beautiful natural scenery' is more natural. 'Unique city places' is better expressed as 'unique urban areas'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and choose natural collocations for nouns and adjectives.