视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve fluency and clarity: remove hesitations (uh), correct grammar (pictures, record the life), and produce a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, and). Keep the answer to 2–4 sentences. Also give a brief example of what you capture (landscapes, people, architecture).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures whenever I travel because photos help me record important moments and places. For example, I often photograph landscapes and local markets so I can remember the atmosphere and show my family later.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a comparison using linking words. Correct grammar (I prefer rural areas to urban areas) and avoid repetition. Mention concrete aspects (air quality, green space, tranquility) and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas to urban ones because the environment is cleaner and there is more greenery. For instance, countryside scenes often have open fields and quiet rivers, which feel more relaxing than crowded city streets.

建議: Make a direct statement and support it with precise reasons. Correct pronunciation and grammar (Absolutely my own country; there are many kinds of landscapes). Avoid unrelated points (meals) unless relevant. Explain with examples of specific places or types of scenery in your country and use linking words like because or for example.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because China has a huge variety of landscapes, from mountains to ancient towns. For example, I enjoy visiting places like Guilin for its karst hills and the countryside near Hangzhou for lakes and tea terraces.

× Yes, of course, every time I travel, I will take a lot of picture because the picture is not only uh for record, the live, but also where I was older and when I the, when the time is go past, I I can uh.

✓ Yes, of course. Every time I travel, I take a lot of pictures because the pictures are not only for recording my life, but also to remember where I was when time passes.

Errors include incorrect verb forms and gerunds: 'for record' should be 'for recording' (verb + -ing) to show purpose; 'will take' is unnecessary future with habitual action so simple present 'take' is better; 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' for 'a lot of'; awkward clause 'where I was older and when I the, when the time is go past' corrected to 'to remember where I was when time passes'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, use '-ing' after 'for' to express purpose, and ensure plural agreement with quantifiers like 'a lot of'.

× I prefer rural area than urban area in my point and views.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas from my point of view.

The phrase 'prefer X than Y' is incorrect; English uses 'prefer X to Y' (preposition use). Also 'in my point and views' is wrong; correct idiom is 'from my point of view'. Use plural 'areas' to match general preference. Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y' and the fixed expression 'from my point of view'.

× Rural areas environment is much better than urban area and the views is much nicer, much green than.

✓ The rural environment is much better than the urban environment, and the views are much nicer and greener.

Multiple subject-verb and agreement issues: 'Rural areas environment' should be 'The rural environment' (article and noun order); 'is much better than urban area' needs 'the urban environment' for parallelism; 'the views is' must be 'the views are' (plural verb); 'much green than' should be comparative 'greener'. Suggestion: ensure singular/plural agreement and parallel structure when comparing two things, and use comparative adjectives ('greener').

× Is absolutely my country, you know, I'm Chinese, I live in China, so there are so many kind of meals in China and include that the views you can see at the other country we also have.

✓ It's absolutely my country. You know, I'm Chinese and I live in China, so there are so many kinds of food in China, and the views you can see in other countries we also have here.

Starts with missing 'there is/it is': 'Is absolutely my country' needs 'It's' (there be/it is issue). 'Kind of meals' should be 'kinds of food' (noun choice and pluralization). 'Include that the views you can see at the other country we also have' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'the views you can see in other countries we also have here' using proper preposition 'in' and clearer subject. Suggestion: begin sentences properly with 'It's' or 'There is', use 'kinds of' for variety, and use 'in other countries' to indicate location; end with 'here' to clarify comparison.