视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid repetition like “this, as these”. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because the photos help me remember trips. For example, I always take landscape shots when I visit mountains or coastlines to capture the atmosphere and remember the experience.

建議: Begin directly answering the question without saying “Yes” to a choice question. Fix grammar (use plural forms and articles) and be more specific about what you like in rural views. Use a linking phrase (for instance, because) and one concrete detail.

範例: I prefer rural views because there are fewer tall buildings, which allows me to see natural features clearly. For instance, wide fields and rolling hills give better photo opportunities and a calmer atmosphere than crowded city streets.

建議: Answer directly and correct phrasing (avoid repeating words and use correct pronouns). Be specific about what attracts you to London and give one brief example. Replace vague phrases like “available out there” with precise details.

範例: I prefer views in other countries, especially London, because it has a mix of historic landmarks and green spaces. For example, I enjoy photographing places like Hyde Park and the view of the Thames with the Houses of Parliament in the background.

× I love taking pictures of different views as this, as these pictures have become a remembrance of the trips.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views like these, as these pictures have become remembrances of the trips.

The sentence mixes singular and plural demonstratives: 'this' (singular) with 'these' (plural). Replace 'this' with 'these' to match plural 'pictures'. Also 'remembrance' as a countable noun referring to multiple photos should be plural 'remembrances' or better 'mementos' or 'memories'. Suggestion: use 'like these' and 'remembrances' or 'memories' for clarity.

× I prefer views in rural areas because of the presence of less tall building and skyscrapers which help to show the beauty of the views.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there are fewer tall buildings and skyscrapers, which helps to show the beauty of the views.

Use 'fewer' with countable nouns and plural form 'buildings'. 'Less' is incorrect with countable items. Also 'building' should be plural 'buildings'. Added 'there are' to improve flow and changed comma use. 'Which helps' agrees with 'the presence' idea; alternatively 'which help' could agree with 'buildings and skyscrapers'.

× So I prefer views in in another country, preferably in London, because of their wide variety of stadiums and parks that are available out there.

✓ So I prefer views in another country, preferably in London, because of its wide variety of stadiums and parks.

Pronoun 'their' incorrectly refers to 'another country' which is singular; use 'its'. Removed duplicated 'in' and the unnecessary phrase 'that are available out there' to make the sentence concise. Also 'another country, preferably London' is clearer without extra words.