视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like “or anything” and vague phrases like “explore it around.”

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I am learning photography. For example, I often practice composing landscapes and cityscapes during weekend walks to improve my framing and lighting skills.

建議: Give a direct preference or explain why you like both with clearer supporting details and linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “whenever I see something nice”) and keep under five sentences.

範例: I like both urban and rural views because each offers different qualities. Urban scenes give me interesting architecture and vibrant street life, while rural landscapes offer peaceful nature and dramatic skies, so I take photos of either depending on what inspires me.

建議: Avoid political complaints and vague, unsubstantiated statements. Answer directly and politely; give specific, non-political reasons for your preference (e.g., variety of architecture, different landscapes, travel opportunities). Keep language neutral and concise.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different architectural styles and natural landscapes that I haven't seen at home. For instance, I enjoy photographing European historic buildings for their detailed facades and East Asian gardens for their unique design.

× As someone who wants to learn photography, yes I do, but I am not an expert or anything and I just like to explore it around.

✓ As someone who wants to learn photography, yes I do, but I am not an expert or anything and I just like to explore around it.

The phrase 'explore it around' has incorrect word order and redundant pronoun 'it'. Use 'explore around it' or better 'explore it' or 'explore the area'. Suggestion: choose 'explore it' if referring to photography or 'explore around'/'explore the area' if referring to places. Maintain present simple tense for habitual actions.

× I prefer both because I think both are great and when I have the chance to visit one of those I will just take a picture of whenever I see nice.

✓ I prefer both because I think both are great, and when I have the chance to visit one of them I will just take a picture whenever I see something nice.

Errors: 'one of those' is awkward; use 'one of them'. 'take a picture of whenever I see nice' is ungrammatical because 'see nice' lacks an object and 'of' is unnecessary. Use 'take a picture whenever I see something nice'. Also added a comma to separate clauses. Tense (future 'will') is fine for a hypothetical occasion.

× Well, as someone who lives here in the Philippines, I admit that it is not very great in here because our president is corrupt and we don't have the enough budget to build such a such a thing like the other countries.

✓ Well, as someone who lives here in the Philippines, I admit that it is not very great here because our president is corrupt and we don't have enough budget to build things like in other countries.

Problems corrected: remove redundant 'in' after 'great' ('great here' not 'great in here'); remove extra 'the' before 'enough' ('enough budget'); remove duplicated 'such a such a' and change 'a thing like the other countries' to 'things like in other countries' for natural comparison. Prepositions and article use fixed. Tone note: content is political; keep factual phrasing.

× So I prefer the other countries.

✓ So I prefer other countries.

'The other countries' implies a specific set already mentioned; here 'other countries' (general) is more appropriate. Pronoun/article choice corrected for natural English.