视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations (uh), and limit to about 2–3 sentences. Use a linking phrase to add a reason or example. Also correct verb forms (e.g., 'taking' → 'take', 'I want the memory to stay' → 'I want to keep the memory').

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I can keep the memories on my phone. For example, when I see a beautiful park or mountain, I take a photo so I can look at it later and remember the moment.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then provide specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., 'rural rural', 'were there'). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences) and use precise vocabulary like 'greenery', 'scenery', 'less pollution'.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they have more greenery and peaceful scenery. For example, there is less noise and air pollution in the countryside, so I can enjoy fresh air and quiet walks.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrasing ('almost a lively', 'change in a second')—be precise about what you mean (e.g., 'refreshing climate', 'varied weather'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use consistent tense and noun forms ('greenery' not 'greeneries').

範例: I prefer views in my country because it has many mountains and abundant greenery. The climate is generally cool and refreshing, and the varied weather makes the scenery feel lively and interesting.

× Yes, I would love to taking picture of different views because, uh, I'll capture the photos in my mobile phone.

✓ Yes, I would love to take pictures of different views because I'll capture the photos on my mobile phone.

The phrase 'would love to' should be followed by the base verb (infinitive without to) so 'to take' is correct; also use the plural 'pictures' to match general activity and use 'on my mobile phone' for correct preposition. Suggestion: use 'would love to take' and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× So the, uh, memory I want to stay in my phone when I want to see a good, uh, environmental area, so I click the picture.

✓ So I want the memory to stay on my phone; when I want to see a nice environment, I click a picture.

The original has awkward word order and article use. 'The memory I want to stay' should be rephrased to 'I want the memory to stay'; 'on my phone' is correct preposition; 'a good environmental area' is unnatural — 'a nice environment' or 'a scenic place' works; 'I click the picture' should be 'I click a picture' or 'I take a picture' because 'picture' is indefinite. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb order and correct articles ('a' for non-specific singular nouns).

× I prefer views in a rural rural area because on that there are more greenery and scenery on that area.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there is more greenery and scenery there.

Use 'in rural areas' or 'in a rural area' consistently; 'on that' is incorrect — use 'there'; 'more greenery' is uncountable so use singular verb 'is' when referring generally ('there is more greenery'); avoid repeating words. Suggestion: choose singular or plural consistently and use 'there is/are' appropriately.

× No noise pollution or air pollution were there.

✓ There is no noise pollution or air pollution.

The original uses past tense 'were' incorrectly when describing a general current state. Use present tense 'is' because the student is making a general statement about the rural area. Also use 'there is' for singular uncountable nouns or combined uncountable items. Suggestion: use present simple for general facts.

× Uh, the greenery was more on in the rural area.

✓ The greenery is more abundant in the rural area.

Using past tense 'was' is not appropriate for a general truth; use present simple 'is'. Also rephrase 'more on in' to 'more abundant in' or 'more common in'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual or general descriptions and choose natural collocations like 'more abundant' or 'more common.'

× I prefer views in my country because there are many mountains and greeneries over there.

✓ I prefer views in my country because there are many mountains and greenery there.

'Greeneries' is not a standard plural; 'greenery' is an uncountable noun. 'Over there' is redundant after 'in my country' — use 'there' or omit it. Suggestion: use uncountable form 'greenery' and keep prepositions concise.

× Their atmosphere almo almost a lively and the temperature was cool and sometimes the temperature will change in a second.

✓ The atmosphere is almost always lively, and the temperature is cool, although it can change very quickly.

'Their' is incorrect pronoun for referring to 'my country' or 'the place' — use 'the' or 'its' depending on noun; 'almo almost' is a typo; mixing tenses ('was' and 'will') is inconsistent. Use present simple for general descriptions ('is lively', 'is cool') and 'can change very quickly' for frequent possibility. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronoun ('its') or definite article; keep tense consistent (present simple) and use modal 'can' for ability/possibility.

× So I like my country's view.

✓ So I like the views of my country.

'My country's view' is awkward; plural 'views' is more natural when speaking generally. Use present simple 'like' for current preference. Suggestion: say 'the views of my country' or 'my country's scenery' for natural phrasing.