视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases, and use clearer wording and linking expressions. Also correct articles and noun forms (e.g. "a fan of photography", "the countryside"). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences and add one specific example to support your statement.

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I often carry my camera and walk around the city, photographing places from the busy business district to the peaceful countryside. For example, last weekend I took photos of a riverside market and some quiet farm fields to capture contrasting moods.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Correct grammar (e.g. "the countryside"; "contains fresh air"), reduce fillers like "uh," and use one linking word to expand (e.g. "because" or "so"). Provide one specific reason or brief example rather than repeating 'peaceful'.

範例: I prefer views in the countryside because the air is fresher and the atmosphere is much quieter. For instance, when I visit a rural village I enjoy walking among fields and listening to birds, which helps me relax after a busy week.

建議: Be more precise and fluent. Use a clear topic sentence (e.g. "I prefer views in other countries") and give a specific reason and example. Remove fillers like "uh" and correct phrasing ("different countries have different landscapes and cultures"). Complete your example with a concrete destination or activity.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural experiences. For example, I would like to visit Italy to photograph historic cityscapes and ancient architecture, which would be very different from the scenery in my own country.

× Yes, I'm a fan of the photography, so I always take my camera, go around the city to the different area from the business district to the peaceful, our countryside to feel the different view and other.

✓ Yes, I'm a fan of photography, so I always take my camera and go around the city to different areas, from the business district to the peaceful countryside, to capture different views.

The phrase 'the photography' uses an unnecessary definite article; 'photography' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'the different area' should be plural 'different areas' to match meaning. 'the peaceful, our countryside' mixes articles and pronouns incorrectly; use 'the peaceful countryside' or 'our peaceful countryside'. Conjunctions and commas were adjusted for clarity. Suggestion: omit 'the' before uncountable nouns and ensure articles/pronouns are not combined. Grammar problem type id:22

× Yes, I'm a fan of the photography, so I always take my camera, go around the city to the different area from the business district to the peaceful, our countryside to feel the different view and other.

✓ Yes, I'm a fan of photography, so I always take my camera and go around the city to different areas, from the business district to the peaceful countryside, to capture different views.

'area' should be plural 'areas' because the speaker mentions multiple places. 'view' should be plural 'views' to match 'different'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple locations or kinds. Grammar problem type id:1

× Yes, I'm a fan of the photography, so I always take my camera, go around the city to the different area from the business district to the peaceful, our countryside to feel the different view and other.

✓ Yes, I'm a fan of photography, so I always take my camera and go around the city to different areas, from the business district to the peaceful countryside, to capture different views.

The original sentence has run-on structure and mixed fragments ('go around the city to the different area... to feel the different view and other'). It needed conjunctions and infinitive phrases to show purpose ('to capture'). Suggestion: break into clear clauses and use parallel structure. Grammar problem type id:26

× So I think I prefer the countryside view because the environment contain the refresh air and uh, peaceful environment, and the view can make me calm and peaceful.

✓ I think I prefer the countryside view because the environment contains fresh air and is peaceful, and the view makes me calm.

'contain the refresh air' has incorrect adjective form and article use; use 'contains fresh air'. Repetition 'peaceful environment' then 'peaceful' is redundant. 'make me calm and peaceful' simplified to 'makes me calm'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms ('fresh' not 'refresh') and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type id:13

× Well, I think uh, I choose to the other country view because the different country has a different view with a different culture.

✓ Well, I think I would choose views in other countries because different countries have different scenery and cultures.

The original uses 'choose' (simple present) awkwardly when expressing preference; conditional 'would choose' is more natural for hypothetical preference. Also 'the other country view' is ungrammatical. 'the different country has' should be plural 'different countries have'. Suggestion: use 'would' for hypothetical choices and match noun number. Grammar problem type id:5

× Well, I think uh, I choose to the other country view because the different country has a different view with a different culture.

✓ Well, I think I would choose views in other countries because different countries have different scenery and cultures.

'choose to the other country view' misuses prepositions; say 'choose views in other countries' or 'choose to visit other countries'. Also 'with a different culture' is better as 'and different cultures'. Suggestion: use 'in' for location ('in other countries') and 'visit' when appropriate. Grammar problem type id:11

× For instance, I would like to visit some European country to learn the history with the different city view and the.

✓ For instance, I would like to visit some European countries to learn about the history and see different cityscapes.

'some European country' should be plural 'some European countries' when unspecified multiple. 'learn the history' requires preposition 'learn about the history'. 'the different city view and the.' was incomplete and used unnecessary 'the'. Suggestion: use plural forms for general examples and include appropriate prepositions ('learn about'). Grammar problem type id:22