打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับปรุงความชัดเจนและความเป็นธรรมชาติ โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล และลดคำซ้ำ เช่น แทนที่จะพูดว่า "easy, simple" ให้ใช้คำเดียวที่ชัดเจน เพิ่มตัวอย่างเฉพาะเช่นประเภทบันทึกหรือประโยชน์ที่ได้จากการจดบันทึก

範例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate better than typing. For example, during lectures I take handwritten notes of key points and after class I write a short reflection in my journal, which helps me remember and organise ideas.

建議: ลดความซ้ำซ้อนและจัดโครงสร้างให้ชัดเจน ตอบตรงคำถามก่อนแล้วอธิบายสั้นๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น "because" หรือ "so" ให้เหตุผลเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น เช่น ระบุซอฟต์แวร์หรือกิจกรรมที่ทำเมื่อพิมพ์

範例: Yes, I use a laptop every day for my language classes because it allows me to access online exercises and type essays quickly. Using a laptop is convenient for researching vocabulary and submitting assignments.

建議: ทำให้ประวัติชัดเจนและลำดับเวลาเป็นระเบียบ เริ่มโดยระบุช่วงอายุหรือปี จากนั้นอธิบายวิธีการเรียนและเครื่องมือที่ใช้ โดยหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคไม่สมบูรณ์หรือซ้ำคำ เช่น "I type" ที่ไม่ให้ข้อมูลเพิ่ม

範例: I learned to type in primary school when I was about nine years old. It was part of our computer class, where we practised with a typing program to improve accuracy and speed, and completed weekly exercises.

建議: แก้ไขความคลุมเครือและความซ้ำซ้อน พูดให้ชัดเจนเป็นประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ และยกตัวอย่างวิธีการที่เฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น ฝึกผ่านแบบทดสอบความเร็ว ฝึกพิมพ์ดีดแบบสัมผัส หรือกำหนดเวลาเรียนรู้ต่อวัน หลีกเลี่ยงคำเติมเช่น "you know"

範例: I improve my typing by practising every day for at least 20 minutes, using online speed tests and touch-typing exercises. I also try to type lecture notes and short essays to build accuracy and speed.

× I prefer handwriting because it's easy, simple and can make you stay focused when you want to study.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it is easy, simple, and helps me stay focused when I want to study.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect because the speaker is describing their own preference; use 'me' to match the subject. Also 'it's' refers to handwriting so keep 'it is' and change 'can make you stay focused' to 'helps me stay focused' for natural collocation and subject consistency.

× For example, I always write down when I have a lecture class and also I always write the journal in the morning.

✓ For example, I always take notes during lectures and I always write in my journal in the morning.

'Write down when I have a lecture class' is awkward and 'lecture class' is redundant; use plural 'lectures' or 'during lectures'. 'The journal' should be 'my journal' to show possession. Use 'take notes' as the natural collocation.

× Yes I do, because I have a class to study the language and using laptop is comfortable and convenient to learn.

✓ Yes, I do, because I have language classes and using a laptop is comfortable and convenient for learning.

Use plural 'classes' if referring to recurring classes. Add article 'a' before 'laptop'. Change 'to learn' to the gerund phrase 'for learning' to match 'convenient' collocation.

× And nowadays typing in the laptop is really simple and easy to use.

✓ Nowadays typing on the laptop is really simple and easy.

'In the laptop' is incorrect preposition; use 'on the laptop'. 'Simple and easy to use' is redundant; 'simple and easy' suffices. Also remove leading 'And' for formality.

× Well, I learned how to start writing when I was in the primary school.

✓ Well, I learned how to start typing when I was in primary school.

Use 'typing' rather than 'writing' if context is keyboard skill. Omit 'the' before 'primary school' in English. Past tense 'learned' is correct.

× I learned at school during computer class because it was a part of the curriculum and we practice typing exercises.

✓ I learned at school during computer class because it was part of the curriculum and we practiced typing exercises.

'A part of' can be simplified to 'part of'. Verb tense mismatch: use past 'practiced' to match 'learned' and 'was' in past. American spelling 'practiced' used; British 'practised' acceptable.

× For example, I use a typing program to improve my speed and I type.

✓ For example, I used a typing program to improve my speed and to practice typing.

Tense should be past to match previous sentence. 'I type' is incomplete; change to 'to practice typing' for clarity and correct verb + -ing use.

× Using that skill every day is the key.

✓ Using that skill every day is the key to improvement.

Add complement 'to improvement' to complete the idea; 'Using that skill every day is key' also possible. Gerund phrase 'Using that skill' is correct.

× So typing every day can make you, you know, improve your writing automatically.

✓ So typing every day can help you improve your writing automatically.

Remove filler 'you know' and fix verb structure: 'can make you improve' is less natural than 'can help you improve'. Maintain pronoun 'you' if advising general audience.

× Because I always work and typing in a notebook all the day every day.

✓ Because I always work and type in a notebook all day, every day.

Parallel structure requires 'work and type' (both base verbs). 'All the day' is incorrect; use 'all day'. Add comma before 'every day' for clarity.

× So I think using them is a good one.

✓ So I think using them is a good thing.

'A good one' is inappropriate; use 'a good thing'. However referent 'them' is vague; better to use 'this habit' or 'these skills' to be specific.