打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., repeating 'while handwriting' and 'time'). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'faster', 'more efficient', 'legible').

範例: I prefer typing because it’s faster and more efficient. For example, I can share messages instantly and edit my text easily, whereas handwriting is slower and harder to correct.

建議: Be direct and avoid unnecessary phrases. Use clear linking words and correct small errors (e.g., 'feel' → 'feels', remove 'each and everything' and unclear 'welcome'). Give one specific detail about how you use your phone for typing.

範例: I don’t use a desktop or laptop regularly; I mainly type on my smartphone because it’s more convenient and always with me. For instance, I use it to send messages, take quick notes, and reply to emails on the go.

建議: Start with a clear timeframe, then give brief supporting details. Avoid repeating the same idea (e.g., 'taught us how to type' twice). Use linking words like 'then' or 'later' correctly.

範例: I learned to type in sixth grade during a computer class at school. My teacher showed us proper finger placement, and later I practised more through online lessons.

建議: Give a concise topic sentence then specific methods you used and their effects. Avoid vague phrasing and tense/number errors (e.g., 'we had a lot of fun and improved my typing' → 'we had fun and improved our typing'). Mention one or two concrete examples of exercises or games and a result.

範例: I improved my typing in ninth-grade IT classes where we practised speed and accuracy using typing games. For example, playing timed drills helped me increase my words-per-minute and reduce mistakes.

× Mostly I love typing only because it is more convenient and even handwriting is time consuming.

✓ Mostly I love typing because it is more convenient, and handwriting is time-consuming.

The original sentence misused 'only' and 'even' and lacked appropriate conjunction punctuation. Use 'because' to show reason and 'and' to connect the contrasting clause. Hyphenate 'time-consuming' as a compound adjective before a noun. Remove 'only' if it does not add meaning.

× We can easily share text instantly with each other while typing and while handwriting, letters take much more time.

✓ We can easily share text instantly when typing, but when handwriting, letters take much more time.

Use consistent conjunctions to contrast actions: 'when typing' not 'while typing and while handwriting' joined awkwardly. Replace 'with each other' (redundant) and use 'but' to show contrast. Ensure clauses are connected properly.

× Not really, because I do not have any desktop or laptop keyboard as I wholly rely on my smartphone.

✓ Not really, because I do not have a desktop or laptop; I wholly rely on my smartphone.

The sentence had awkward phrasing 'any desktop or laptop keyboard'. Simplify to 'a desktop or laptop' and separate ideas with a semicolon or conjunction. 'Wholly rely' is acceptable; adjust punctuation for clarity.

× It is more convenient to me and feel more personal.

✓ It is more convenient for me and feels more personal.

Use 'for me' rather than 'to me' for convenience. The verb must agree with the subject: 'it feels' (third-person singular) rather than 'feel'.

× I can easily share each and everything while typing with each other and even make some short notes on my welcome.

✓ I can easily share everything while typing and even make short notes on my phone.

'Each and everything' is redundant; 'everything' suffices. 'With each other' is unnecessary because 'share' implies exchange. 'On my welcome' is incorrect — likely meant 'on my phone' or 'on the device', so replace with 'on my phone'. Also remove 'some' before 'short notes' for conciseness.

× In my 6th standard we have a subject of computer and our teacher taught us how to type on computer.

✓ In my 6th standard we had a computer subject, and our teacher taught us how to type on the computer.

Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference 'In my 6th standard.' Use 'computer subject' or 'a computer class' and include the definite article 'the' before 'computer' when referring to the device.

× So she really taught me how to type on the keyboard and later I had some online classes also.

✓ So she taught me how to type on the keyboard, and later I also had some online classes.

Move 'also' to the natural position after the verb phrase 'had' or before it: 'I also had.' Remove 'really' which is unnecessary. Add comma before conjunction for clarity.

× In our 9th standard we have a subject of IT Information technology in which our teacher taught us how to improve speed and accuracy of typing.

✓ In 9th grade we had an IT (Information Technology) subject in which our teacher taught us how to improve typing speed and accuracy.

Use 'in 9th grade' or 'in our 9th standard' consistently; change present 'have' to past 'had.' Use 'an IT subject' and place the full form in parentheses. Use the noun phrase 'typing speed and accuracy' rather than 'speed and accuracy of typing' for natural word order.

× So there were many games about this information.

✓ So there were many games related to this topic.

'Games about this information' is awkward. Use 'related to this topic' or 'designed to teach this' to express purpose. 'Information' is too abstract here.

× So we just played games and it was so useful to us even we had a lot of fun and improved my typing also.

✓ So we played games, and they were very useful; we had a lot of fun and improved our typing skills.

Maintain past tense consistently: 'played' and 'were.' Use plural possessive 'our typing skills' to match 'we.' Replace 'so useful to us even we had a lot of fun' with clearer punctuation and conjunctions. Remove 'just' if not necessary and place 'also' appropriately or omit.