旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more directly and avoid repetition. “I love to prefer” is incorrect; use “I prefer” or “I love sitting.” Also, “travel holic” should be “travel enthusiast,” “sit in the window” should be “sit by the window,” and “admire the nature” is more natural as “admire the scenery.” Keep the answer to two or three well-organized sentences and connect the reason with “because.”

範例: Definitely. I prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy admiring the scenery as we travel. It also gives me a better view of the cities and countryside, which makes the journey more interesting.

建議: Begin with a clear answer such as “Yes, I did.” Use the past tense consistently: “visited,” not “visit.” The phrases “visit to various holidays” and “heal stations” are unnatural; say “travelled to different holiday destinations” and “health resorts.” Avoid repeating “places” and give one specific example, linked with “for example” or “especially.”

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family often took long trips to religious sites, mountain resorts, and other scenic destinations. For example, we once travelled to a mountain town, and I really enjoyed the beautiful views and spending time with my family.

× I love to prefer to sit by the window while traveling because I'm a travel holic and I love to admire the nature and also to look all the things and the city all over the world when I'm traveling and to get the information about all surroundings. So that's why I love to sit in the window.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window while traveling because I'm a travelaholic, and I love to admire nature, look at all the sights and cities around the world, and learn about my surroundings. That's why I love to sit by the window.

We say look at something, not look something. We also say sit by the window when we mean sitting next to it. The preposition in suggests that the person is physically inside the window.

× I love to prefer to sit by the window while traveling because I'm a travel holic and I love to admire the nature and also to look all the things and the city all over the world when I'm traveling and to get the information about all surroundings. So that's why I love to sit in the window.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window while traveling because I'm a travelaholic, and I love to admire nature, look at all the sights and cities around the world, and learn about my surroundings. That's why I love to sit by the window.

Nature is generally used without the definite article when referring to the natural world in general. Information is also usually uncountable and does not need the in this sentence. The phrase my surroundings is more natural than all surroundings because it refers to the area around the speaker.

× Many times I had a long journey with my family as a child and I usually visit to various holidays or religious places as well as often to the heal stations and the places with the mountains and also the picturesque view places. So I love that.

✓ Many times, I had long journeys with my family as a child, and I usually visited various holiday destinations and religious places. We also often visited hill stations and places with mountain scenery and picturesque views. I loved those trips.

The question asks about experiences during childhood, so the past tense is needed. Visit should be changed to visited. The final sentence is also changed to the past tense because it refers to those childhood trips.

× Many times I had a long journey with my family as a child and I usually visit to various holidays or religious places as well as often to the heal stations and the places with the mountains and also the picturesque view places. So I love that.

✓ Many times, I had long journeys with my family as a child, and I usually visited various holiday destinations and religious places. We also often visited hill stations and places with mountain scenery and picturesque views. I loved those trips.

The verb visit is followed directly by its object, so we say visited various places, not visited to various places. The same structure applies to hill stations and other destinations.

× Many times I had a long journey with my family as a child and I usually visit to various holidays or religious places as well as often to the heal stations and the places with the mountains and also the picturesque view places. So I love that.

✓ Many times, I had long journeys with my family as a child, and I usually visited various holiday destinations and religious places. We also often visited hill stations and places with mountain scenery and picturesque views. I loved those trips.

Many times refers to more than one occasion, so the plural form journeys is more appropriate than the singular form journey. Similarly, picturesque views is plural because the places can have multiple views.

× Many times I had a long journey with my family as a child and I usually visit to various holidays or religious places as well as often to the heal stations and the places with the mountains and also the picturesque view places. So I love that.

✓ Many times, I had long journeys with my family as a child, and I usually visited various holiday destinations and religious places. We also often visited hill stations and places with mountain scenery and picturesque views. I loved those trips.

The original sentence combines several destinations and activities in an unclear and unbalanced structure. Separating the ideas into two sentences and using parallel verb phrases makes the answer clearer and more natural.