旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接并给出了明确原因，内容也比较完整。不过，表达中有一些不自然或重复的地方："look at the beautiful view with the skies"不自然，可以改为"enjoy the view of the sky, buildings, and mountains"；"I feel it's relaxed"应改为"I feel relaxed"。此外，最好使用连接词使细节衔接更顺畅，并避免连续堆砌名词。

範例: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window when I travel by plane or train. I enjoy looking at the changing scenery, such as the sky, buildings, and mountains. Besides, having a window seat makes the journey feel more relaxing and enjoyable.

建議: 回答了问题，也提供了原因和例子，但语法错误较多，影响自然度和准确性："any long journey"应改为"any long journeys"或"a long journey"；"my parents was"应为"my parents were"；"their works"应为"their work"；"a short weekend trips"应为"short weekend trips"；"relative houses"更自然的说法是"our relatives' homes"。另外，句子过长，重复使用两个"so"，建议拆成两到三句，并用"because"和"as a result"清晰连接原因与结果。

範例: No, I didn’t really have any long journeys with my family when I was a child. My parents were busy with work, and my siblings had to concentrate on school. As a result, we usually took short weekend trips to nearby parks or visited our relatives’ homes instead.

× Of course, when I travel by plane or train, I prefer to sit next to the window because I can look at the beautiful view with the skies or the buildings, mountains and I feel it's relaxed and enjoyable for me.

✓ Of course, when I travel by plane or train, I prefer to sit next to the window because I can look at the beautiful view of the sky, buildings, and mountains, and I feel relaxed and find the experience enjoyable.

“Relaxed”通常用来描述人的感受，而不是描述事物。这里的主语是“I”，所以应说“I feel relaxed”。如果要描述景色让人放松，应使用“relaxing”，例如“The view is relaxing”。另外，“enjoyable”应修饰事物或经历，因此改为“find the experience enjoyable”更准确。

× Of course, when I travel by plane or train, I prefer to sit next to the window because I can look at the beautiful view with the skies or the buildings, mountains and I feel it's relaxed and enjoyable for me.

✓ Of course, when I travel by plane or train, I prefer to sit next to the window because I can look at the beautiful view of the sky, buildings, and mountains, and I feel relaxed and find the experience enjoyable.

表示“某物的景色”时，通常使用“a view of...”，而不是“a view with...”。因此，“the beautiful view with the skies”应改为“the beautiful view of the sky”。建议记住搭配“a view of + 名词”。

× Of course, when I travel by plane or train, I prefer to sit next to the window because I can look at the beautiful view with the skies or the buildings, mountains and I feel it's relaxed and enjoyable for me.

✓ Of course, when I travel by plane or train, I prefer to sit next to the window because I can look at the beautiful view of the sky, buildings, and mountains, and I feel relaxed and find the experience enjoyable.

列举多个项目时，最后两个项目之间应使用“and”。原句中的“or”表示“或者”，会改变句意；同时，“buildings, mountains”之间也需要用“and”连接。建议使用“名词A, 名词B, and 名词C”的并列结构。

× I didn't have any long journey with my family because my parents was busy with their works and my siblings had to focus on school so we usually just took a short weekend trips to nearby parks or relative houses, so I didn't go to travel for a long time.

✓ I didn't have any long journeys with my family because my parents were busy with their work and my siblings had to focus on school, so we usually just took short weekend trips to nearby parks or our relatives' houses, so I didn't go travelling for a long time.

在否定句中，“any”后面通常接可数名词复数，因此“any long journey”应改为“any long journeys”。“Work”表示工作时通常是不可数名词，不能使用复数“works”。“A short weekend trips”中“a”表示单数，但“trips”是复数，二者不一致；这里应改为“short weekend trips”。建议特别注意限定词和名词单复数必须保持一致。

× I didn't have any long journey with my family because my parents was busy with their works and my siblings had to focus on school so we usually just took a short weekend trips to nearby parks or relative houses, so I didn't go to travel for a long time.

✓ I didn't have any long journeys with my family because my parents were busy with their work and my siblings had to focus on school, so we usually just took short weekend trips to nearby parks or our relatives' houses, so I didn't go travelling for a long time.

主语“my parents”是复数，所以be动词应使用“were”，不能使用单数形式“was”。建议先判断主语是单数还是复数，再选择“is/are”或“was/were”。

× I didn't have any long journey with my family because my parents was busy with their works and my siblings had to focus on school so we usually just took a short weekend trips to nearby parks or relative houses, so I didn't go to travel for a long time.

✓ I didn't have any long journeys with my family because my parents were busy with their work and my siblings had to focus on school, so we usually just took short weekend trips to nearby parks or our relatives' houses, so I didn't go travelling for a long time.

不定冠词“a”只能修饰单数可数名词。原句中的“a short weekend trips”把单数冠词和复数名词放在一起，语法不正确。因为这里表示通常性的多次短途旅行，应删除“a”，使用“short weekend trips”。

× I didn't have any long journey with my family because my parents was busy with their works and my siblings had to focus on school so we usually just took a short weekend trips to nearby parks or relative houses, so I didn't go to travel for a long time.

✓ I didn't have any long journeys with my family because my parents were busy with their work and my siblings had to focus on school, so we usually just took short weekend trips to nearby parks or our relatives' houses, so I didn't go travelling for a long time.

“Go”表示“去进行某项活动”时，后面通常接动词的-ing形式，例如“go travelling”或“go shopping”。因此，“go to travel”在这里不自然，应改为“go travelling”。更简洁的表达是直接说“so I didn't travel for a long time”。